TPO30_Q1
The article states that Greeks of Syracuse never really built "burning mirror " and it is just a myth. And provides three reason. However, the professor explains that the claims that are state in the reading passage are not convincing and refutes each of the author's reasons.
First, the reading claims that ancient Greek were not technologically advanced enough to make burning mirror. The professor refutes this point by saying that Greek people can attached small and flat copper to make this device in a wide meter shape.
Second, the article posits that the burning mirror would have taken a long time to burn a ship especially while it was moving. the professor opposes this point by explaining that the author assumes just wood on fire while the ship was not just made of wood, other materials in the ship were exist which easily and quickly catched fire, for example peach catch fire in seconds even the ship was moving.
Third, the reading passage says that flaming arrows which was as effective at about the same distance as the burning mirror, was a common way of setting the ships on fire .However According to the professor by using burning mirrors you can not see what set fire on you, you just see the mirror and also he says that the burning mirror was more surprising than flaming arrows.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 128, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... a ship especially while it was moving. the professor opposes this point by explain...
^^^
Line 5, column 287, Rule ID: WERE_VBB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
...de of wood, other materials in the ship were exist which easily and quickly catched ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 292, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
... wood, other materials in the ship were exist which easily and quickly catched fire, ...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 171, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... common way of setting the ships on fire .However According to the professor by us...
^^
Line 7, column 173, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...ommon way of setting the ships on fire .However According to the professor by using bur...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, really, second, so, third, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 30.3222958057 66% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1099.0 1373.03311258 80% => OK
No of words: 228.0 270.72406181 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8201754386 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2377664069 2.5805825403 87% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 145.348785872 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561403508772 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 330.3 419.366225166 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 102.389498363 49.2860985944 208% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 137.375 110.228320801 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5 21.698381199 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.375 7.06452816374 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.409105781228 0.272083759551 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.166656611036 0.0996497079465 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11837528717 0.0662205650399 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228300278924 0.162205337803 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0692337956949 0.0443174109184 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.3589403974 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 11.0289183223 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.2367328918 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 63.6247240618 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.