The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Alex_Khoj on Fri, 07/07/2017 - 08:25

The life cycle of salmon step by step is represented in the given figures.

Overall, it is evident that it takes about9 years in average before salmon will produce a new generation.

According to the first diagram, after approximetly 5-6 months of leaning among small stones near reeds, salmons hatch in an upper river with lackadaisical flow. Fries, which length is equal to 3-8 cm, migrate to a lower river, where they spend 4 years of their life and become 12-15 cm smolt. From fast moving river they swim to open sea. During 5 years in the sea, which is the longest period in their life, they become adults. In the adulthood salmon grow to 70-76 centimeters and and move to slow upper river. There they breed and lay eggs and cycle begins again.

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...lthood salmon grow to 70-76 centimeters and and move to slow upper river. There they br...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 622.0 965.302439024 64% => OK
No of words: 134.0 196.424390244 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64179104478 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.40232815919 3.73543355544 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24372593726 2.65546596893 84% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 106.607317073 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.694029850746 0.547539520022 127% => OK
syllable_count: 181.8 283.868780488 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.114634146341 872% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1524549651 43.030603864 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.75 112.824112599 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.75 22.9334400587 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.125 5.23603664747 21% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110185969736 0.215688989381 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0471682013239 0.103423049105 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0319107101161 0.0843802449381 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0780424149461 0.15604864568 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355822598726 0.0819641961636 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 13.2329268293 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 61.2550243902 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 11.4140731707 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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