Scientists agree that people are damaging their health by eating too much junk food. Some people think that the answer to this problem is to educate people. Others think education will not work. Discuss both views and state your opinion.
Athough eating too much fast food could damage people’s health, some people have believed that the education can solve this problem. However, I would argue that education will not be efficient in this case.
There are numerous reasons that education would affect the junk food consumption. First and foremost, teaching the negative effects of junk food to people’s health for students is nescessary. The students would improve knowledge about nutrition and consequences of consuming fast food which let them have a healthy diet. In addition, tutors should give the information about the process of canned food production to students. For example, processed food is often generated in a massive quantity, which leads to the lack of quality. Moreover, it makes children could be obesity easier.
On the other hand, the education will not be beneficial in this problem because of the following reasons.Firstly, fast food provides people with a wide range of choice. For instance, it has delicious flavours and eye-catching appearances such as seafood or vegetables which makes people can not refuse it although they knew about its detrimental effects. Secondly, education influenced by economic development makes people tend to choose what is the most convenient and affordable for them. To be more specific, there are a lot kinds of fast food restaurants was built, and people can have their meals through only a phone call or a message.
In conclusion, while it is believed by some people that fast food usage too much could be stop by education, I am convinced that it is not a practical measure for this issue.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1370.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20912547529 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84491966984 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585551330798 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 414.0 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8696806136 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.384615385 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2307692308 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4615384615 7.06120827912 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293020233242 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108796815461 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0966630017779 0.0667982634062 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207291623852 0.151304729494 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0984374663866 0.056905535591 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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