When students move to a new school, they sometimes face problems. How can schools help these students with their problems? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.
Through the different stages of our lives, from childhood throughout adulthood we attend different organizations practicing different activities, such as, studying in high schools, researching in university, working in workplace and so on. Among all these institutes, I believe that, high schools play a significant role in our life. Whenever students attend new schools, they may face a great number of problems. In my opinion, schools have a key role in helping students face these problems and succeed.
The first point which sould be taken into consideration is that, schools can establish some extra classes for their students. If schools hold such a classes, students who have not passed the prerequisites can become familiar with essential topics. Better grades can be gotten as a result of these extra courses. For example, while I was at 2nd grade high school, my family and I had to travel from my hometown Shiraz to capital of the country, Tehran. Enrolling at the new high school, I knew nothing about trigonometry, a branch of math which I had never studied at my previous high school. But the new school managed to hold some extra classes for new students like me that were not familiar with the topic. We attended several classes on holidays, taught by our knowledgeable math teacher, Dr. Bagheri. soon I became totally familiar with that topic. Had I not had an opportunity to attend those classes, I could have newer succeed and get excellent grades in math. Seldom could students face and solve such problems involved in their education in a new school without the aid of school in holding extra classes.
The second point is that, schools can pave the way for students to get involved in social activities in school, like playing sports. If students get involved in exercises in school, they can interact better with their classmates in a friendly environment and, as a result make friends. Having friends, they can get along well with, students can get a great deal of enjoyment in school. For example, studying at TM University, one of my classmates was a little introverted and shy. He had been transferred to our school from University of Mashhad. The school counselor suggested him to attend mountain climbing club which we had regular expeditions, camping in nature. One time he came with us while we were going to mountains located at north Tehran. We talked to each other about our interests and enjoyed our time while hiking and we gradually became friends. He is one of my best friends even now after years passed form our graduation. If it hadn't been because of that exercise, we might not have an opportunity to get along well with each other. Rarely can students become accustomed to school environment and make friends without the help of school.
As it has been shown above, school's role in helping students feel better in new school, is crucially important. Not only can schools help students in their studies by holding extra classes, but also those can help them get accustomed to new environment by helping them participate in various social activities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 148, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a class', 'a classis' or simply 'classes'?
Suggestion: a class; a classis; classes
...or their students. If schools hold such a classes, students who have not passed the prere...
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Line 3, column 807, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Soon
...nowledgeable math teacher, Dr. Bagheri. soon I became totally familiar with that top...
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Line 5, column 947, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hadn't
...years passed form our graduation. If it hadnt been because of that exercise, we might...
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Line 7, column 126, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'school'
Suggestion: school
...l, is crucially important. Not only can schools help students in their studies by holdi...
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Line 7, column 200, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this can' or 'those cans'?
Suggestion: this can; those cans
...dies by holding extra classes, but also those can help them get accustomed to new environ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, well, while, for example, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2583.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 520.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96730769231 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68369432624 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469230769231 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 765.0 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5036418942 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6666666667 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2592592593 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7037037037 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346087475364 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113006653467 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0974981150796 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243498063546 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0329482359408 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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