"Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. The idea that women are
solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they
are also responsible for bringing the children up."
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is an issue that mother is the only one who responsible to raise children, where as fatherhood role is also a main factor in shaping a child as much as motherhood. Personally, I support this opinion, both of them have different character. The character is needed to frame a good a person.
A person must have feminine and masculine character when he grows up. A Feminine character gives an empathy, sweet and sensitive heart feeling to him. A person with these high feelings will be a humanity, forgiving and warm individual. He will be an adult who spread love and peace, things that have been lost lately.
A soft heart also needs, masculinity. The good heard should be farmed with good logic and strong mind. This combination will bring him to be good leader. This side will only be filled with a fatherhood. A man usually tends to use his brain rather than his heart. Therefore his capability in using rationality is no doubt.
A body withuot heart is a monster, but he will be weak without rationality. Thus, fatherhood and motherhood are essential to a child. When he was young he needs to be sensitive and polite to an older, but when he is a man he also be a though person so that he can leads his-self and his future family.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 47, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a responsible'.
Suggestion: who is a responsible
...is an issue that mother is the only one who responsible to raise children, where as fatherhood ...
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Line 1, column 82, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whereas'?
Suggestion: whereas
... one who responsible to raise children, where as fatherhood role is also a main factor i...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...eet and sensitive heart feeling to him. A person with these high feelings will be...
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Line 5, column 264, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...to use his brain rather than his heart. Therefore his capability in using rationality is ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 63, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s a monster, but he will be weak without rationality. Thus, fatherhood and mother...
^^
Line 7, column 232, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
... an older, but when he is a man he also be a though person so that he can leads hi...
^^
Line 7, column 266, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'lead'
Suggestion: lead
... also be a though person so that he can leads his-self and his future family.
^^^^^
Line 7, column 304, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n leads his-self and his future family.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, thus, in fact, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 41.998997996 38% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1025.0 1615.20841683 63% => OK
No of words: 224.0 315.596192385 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57589285714 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63720664656 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 176.041082164 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589285714286 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 322.2 506.74238477 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.384769539078 520% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.0082338811 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.0625 106.682146367 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0 20.7667163134 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.3125 7.06120827912 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116903723762 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0397894430645 0.084324248473 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369298980083 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.076018502259 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291167894204 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.1 13.0946893788 54% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 50.2224549098 148% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 11.3001002004 57% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.69 12.4159519038 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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