Some people agree that universities should give students opportunity to take a variety of courses outside of a student's major since it is beneficial to have wide perspectives. However, this requirement can become a burden to students academically and financially. The following essay will argue why that is the case.
Admittedly, after the famous talk by the former CEO of Apple, Steve Jobs, many people started to believe that learning different majors can help one to think about creative things. His education on calligraphy seemed irrelevant or useless for his career as a computer technician at that time, but years later, he developed the original font for the Macintosh based on his knowledge in calligraphy. However, maybe it was possible because he was 'Steve Jobs'. He was the great genius in his field and found and run the company of his own. If it was for ordinary students, who would become an employee whose work is limited to specific divisions, they might not need the education on various majors.
In contrast, it will give burden to students who are already suffering from assignments and projects. I would like to take my country situation as an example. With fewer jobs and higher qualifications, students are facing fierce competition from the college years to get a good GPA. This led students to spend more time at the library doing the assignment and preparing the study materials. Compared to our parents' generation, when university students can spend more time at leisure or sports, they are more stressed by the study. If all university requires all students to take more classes in other majors, it will be a burden, not the interesting process of learning. Thus, before enforcing the policy, discrete consideration on student's current academic burden is needed.
Moreover, the financial burden comes from the increased number of courses is another expected problem. The more courses beyond the major can make students enroll in more semesters and pay the tuition fee for a longer time. Some students with wealthy background do not have to worry about the tuition fee, but there are many students who are suffering from high tuition fee that they do the part-time job and even skip the meals. Considering that the tuition fee is tremendously high that many graduates are still in debt for many years after graduation, the more education is not desirable.
To sum up, the requirement for students to take diverse majors should be reconsidered since it can result in academic and financial burdens.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Some people agree that universities should give students opportunity to take a variety of courses outside of a student's major since it is beneficial to have wide perspectives.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to students and opportunity
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 418 350
No. of Characters: 2063 1500
No. of Different Words: 222 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.522 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.935 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.67 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.9 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.81 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.55 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.293 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.52 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.098 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 111, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
...to take a variety of courses outside of a students major since it is beneficial to have wi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, thus, as for, in contrast, of course, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2118.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 418.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06698564593 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74587794694 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538277511962 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6647618659 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.9 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.13820224719 234% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182136479182 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057590111791 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606131969502 0.0758088955206 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121065874669 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0724566182522 0.0667264976115 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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