The author of the argument concludes that it would be better to sell a house in Adams office rather than Fitch. However, The Speaker assumptions are not completely convincing.
Firstly, the arguement cites that the averge revenues of Fitch is much higher than Adams to support his conclusion. However, a careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it does little credible support of the author`s conclusion in several critical aspects, and even raises several skeptical questions. For example, average(arithmetic mean) is defined as the total revenues that any of the two offices earn divided by the number of houses they sell. To further investigate, by applying the previous defination, may be the number of houses that are sold in Adams is less than those in Fitch while the sum of earnings are higher in Fitch case. Therefore, that may be a false indication of how success is Adams office.
Secondly, the arguer states that Adams real estate is better than Fitch because of number of agents is much higher in Adams rather than those in Fitch. This is a weak and un supported claim, as it does not demonstrate any clear correlation between the number of agents and how to sell a house quickly with higher price. To further illustrate, Even if the number of agents are may be much more in Fitch, this may not be an indication of how much big they are. In other words, Fitch may have more agents but little number of offices to support them.
Thirdly, the arguer assumes that he sell a house much faster in Adams estate this year than his previous trial to sell another one 10 years ago. This is merely an assumption made without solid ground. For example, as things change over time, may Fitch was at rudimentary stages 10 years ago, but now, it updates its infrastructure and marketing policies. Therefore, depending on the author only experience is not a strong judgement that Fitch is less efficient than Adams.
In conclusion, the arguer does not completely convince me that it would be a good idea to sell a house faster and more profitable in Adams rather than Fitch company. Ultimately, the argument would have been strengthened, if the author had shown additional evidences about how many houses are sold per year per each office? And how much revenues of profits they get per year? Also, the author would convince me if he/she shows a survey on a large number of clients in both offices in order to get a clear idea of how fast are each of the two companies?
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 331, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... sold per year per each office? And how much revenues of profits they get per year? ...
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Line 6, column 438, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...convince me if he/she shows a survey on a large number of clients in both offices in order to get...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, while, for example, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2057.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 432.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76157407407 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5896467639 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451388888889 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.9706525145 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.263157895 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7368421053 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84210526316 5.70786347227 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15774825031 0.218282227539 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.05600657501 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590516192422 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0993148584125 0.128457276422 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295186531518 0.0628817314937 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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