Average life expectancy is higher than past, and people now enjoy more longer life. Everyone wants to live longer, but all can’t stay long time in this world for different reasons. In my opinion, I think that people get longer time because they get more foods, proper sanitations facilities and proper medical treatments than past.
First of all, the reduction of food scarcity ensures longer life expectancy. Once, most of the people of the world especially developing and undeveloped countries did not get enough food to live, as a result, they had to work hard to survive, faced malnutrition problems, and died at the beginning of life. The main reasons for these famines were natural calamity and undeveloped agriculture. However, today, food production is increasing day by day, since farmer are practicing Hi-bid crops, which can yield more and can survive in bad weather also. For instance, my father faced a famine in his life, it was 1973, after the birth of new country, Bangladesh, and he was only ten years old boy, that years two great flood occurred and damaged all crops. Consequently, there was a scarcity of food in whole country. He said that more than twenty lac people died that years for food. In contrary, last year, two devastating floods occurred in Bangladesh, but this time people get enough food because they had reserved food which they had kept last year after meeting their need. They saved food because they harvest more hi-bid rich and get more foods. Moreover, many businessman import foods from overseas to recover the food scarcity during the flood. So, this example perfectly illustrates the phenomenon of reducing unexpected death.
Secondly, improvement of use of hygiene latrine and potable water contribute to reduce death caused by diseases. Most of the disease are caused by bacteria and viruses, and these diseases producing organism spread by means of air, water, and food. Therefore, increasing use of sanitation program helps to reduce the casualty caused by these organisms. For example, after that famine which I told before, cholera disease spreaded all over the country and took many people’s life, it became such horrible condition that people thought it was a apocalypse from their Gods. But some eminent person fund out that it spread because of open defecation, and taking unpotable water. So then they took some steps to ensure proper sanitation, as a result after 20, such thing cannot belief at all. Improving sanitation systems helped to reduce the death toll of village people.
In conclusion, people life expectancy is gradually increasing. This is because of getting sufficient amount of foods and because of implementing sanitation system along.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 67, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'longer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: longer
... higher than past, and people now enjoy more longer life. Everyone wants to live longer, bu...
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Line 2, column 545, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...eld more and can survive in bad weather also. For instance, my father faced a famine...
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Line 2, column 716, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'flood' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'floods'.
Suggestion: floods
...ten years old boy, that years two great flood occurred and damaged all crops. Consequ...
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Line 3, column 546, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...le condition that people thought it was a apocalypse from their Gods. But some em...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, as to, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2281.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16063348416 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58870692314 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570135746606 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2519549789 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1739130435 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2173913043 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.34782608696 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131247626643 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0397902547231 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052210493807 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0903214917352 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0490327015284 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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