Your friend has the opportunity to choose either one of two types of majors (fields of study), which one of the following two majors do you think is a better choice, and why?
A major that would allow him to finish years of study and get a degree sooner (so that he would begin to work full-time quickly). Or
A major that requires many years of study that would provide him with more employment opportunities and offers in the future. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Although some people adamantly claim that a profound, longer study in the university leads to gaining a better job, others take an opposite point of view. Personally, I am of the opinion that finishing universtiy in a shorter period and achieving the degree is better than spending a long time in studying. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, intering to the job market, as soon as possible, could help you to identify in what field you are more interested in to work. Although some students discover their talents and favourite majors before interring university, there are some people who found out what realm would be interesting for them after they start working in the real world. For example, my own experience ecould illustrate this argument. I can remember when I wanted to choose my major when I was a freshman, I had a different idea about my skills and interest. For instance, I though that I am a really social person who could communicate with all kinds of people with different background so I chose to be a teacher. Unfortunately, when I graduated from university and started my first job in a primary school, I found out that my temprament was really different than I perceived. Luckily, I had the opportunity to change my career and try different tasks in the school .As I showed my abilities earlier in the university, my professors recommended me to a better high school to spend a short time of internship. Eventually, I decided to work in administration department which was according my interests. That experience showed me that the situation in the real world differs from what we thought. So it would be better if we faced these difficulties earlier to assess themselves.
Second, more working in the real situation and gaining more experience would lead to a better job. When a person want to apply for a job opportunity, in most cases, employers emphasis more on the experiences than the university qualification and number of studying lessons. For example, my brother’s experience in the past could elucidate this. He never got a university degree since he left studying in his university when he was in his second year of studying. Despite my experience, he achieved a great job opportunity in that time so he decided to gain more real experience. Even though all og his classmates and even his teachers thought that his decision was wrong, my brother was determined. After years, when his classmates graduated, they had a myriad of difficulties finding a decent job. Conversely, my brother had a good job with a high income, thanks to his experience.
All in all, I would advise my friend to choose a university which offer shorter study years because by doing so not only he will assess hisself in the real condition of job market, but also he could achieve more experiences which could help him accomplishing a better job.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future. 92
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, people were happier than today? 83
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?When teachers assign projects on which students must work together, the students learn much moreeffectively than when they are asked to work alone on projects. 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teacher were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they were nowadays. 73
- Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun to play games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time to do things together that are related to 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: from
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Suggestion: As
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Message: Did you mean 'since the left'?
Suggestion: since the left
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Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to accomplish' or 'accomplish'.
Suggestion: to accomplish; accomplish
...e more experiences which could help him accomplishing a better job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, if, really, second, so, for example, for instance, i feel, in most cases, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2421.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 500.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.842 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91954174486 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 760.5 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4769781316 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.045454545 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7272727273 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31818181818 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135430526084 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0396291537202 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.038389976951 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10143161283 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399137632099 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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