Keeping animals in captivity is cruel.There is no reason for zoos to exist in the 21st century.How far do you agree or disagree with this opinion.
There is no explanation to carry animal in the stable.Some people think that prisoner animal is brutal.There is no strong reason to construct zoo in 21st century.I agree and disagree with statement in above.
Zoos is a company where a lot of kinds of animals in there that animals on view in public society.Many positive effect from zoos.Children could aquire more knowledge from zoos because children get experience and view all of kinds of animals from other country.Moreover,zoos are able to saved animals from fatality.A lot of popullation and kinds of animal decrease because animals become target because of beater.Zoos provide intensive treatment animals that become victims by hunter.Because a lot of hunter animals in the world that hunter interested wih skin animals,so animal become victims.Zoos support to keep and protect rare animal that popullation rare animal decrease in animals habitat.people could view a new variety of animals because zoos have a scients who always commit experimentation then find a lot of new kinds of animals.
However,zoos have negative effect for animals.Firstly,animals are able to loss it natural habitat because animals do not have big environment to move.Creature have to live near with society.That is not good because There are kinds of animals that cannot live neighboring with people.Moreover,Animals are able to become bored and despressed because creature alway live in stable live in stable.Animal cannot evolving variety and speciess because animals live in stall or zoos include torturing to animals.According to viva news,some research have strong opinion that animals are able to los live spirit in wild when in the past creature live in zoos.what is more,natural selection have ensured directness live animal in wild.
In conclusion.There are a lot of negative effect and positive effect fromm zoos.depend on society to keep and protect animals in the world.
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