Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that that should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

It is undoubtedly true that people argue about subjects should be taken by college students, either based on their passion or based on useful subjects, such as science and technology. I prefer that college students should study focused on their interest rather than particular subjects.

On one hand, people who recommend college students to expert on useful subjects, such as medicine, opine that those subjects will give benefit economically. This is because some subjects will have possibility to gain more wages when they graduated from university. The evidence of this experience especially have obtained more income than other profession, such as artist. This occurrence have been influenced by the condition of third-world countries where there are many problems should be tackled especially in health and science sectors and make those countries have given more allocation on those sectors. This make people tend to force college students focused on it.

On other hand, some people think that study whatever they like will make people to be expert on that sector. This is because they have high passion on that field and will make them learn about it in detail. Based on the research form experts, passion will lead people to expert on what they like because they learn about it intensively with full of happiness and gratitude. Moreover, experts argue that to solve the problems in society, collaborative knowledge between social and arts and science and technology will be essential. For instance, traffic congestion have been faced by big cities like Jakarta, capital city of Indonesia, not only can be solved by using scientific approaches but also social and economic approaches. This is why it is important to have people that experts on many sectors and it could be starts by giving opportunity to students to choose what they have to learn in Universities.

In short, although it might sensible to recommend college students to learn about subjects that useful for their futures, I prefer to give them opportunity to study based on their passion.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 390, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, third, for instance, in short, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1740.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 334.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20958083832 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61880050846 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48502994012 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 544.5 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5737880153 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.285714286 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8571428571 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.78571428571 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352425444854 0.244688304435 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128226200146 0.084324248473 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0862350265181 0.0667982634062 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204675103351 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0656678971037 0.056905535591 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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