Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.
The statement adverts about the discussion on raising up children in Tertia and there are inconsistencies in the reports of two anthropologists. One of them advocates that these children were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents while the other advocates the other way. The statement suggest interview-centered method following the second anthropologist, Dr. Karp. However, there are misjudgments, false assumptions and missing evidences in the argument, before conducting interview-centered method, they should provide these missing evidences and reckon on overlooked points.
Firstly, there is a false assumption about the integrity of the children. They should take into accout their ages, hence, they are more liable to give high importance on their biological parents rather than other members of the village. Due to the bonds of inheritance, they tend to feel intimate and sentimental to their parents, this is an evolutional fact. As a result, these mentioned interviews conducted by Dr. Karp may be subjective and implausible compared to the observations conducted by Dr. Field. They should contemplate on the subjectivity of the children, then should check these inconsistencies more attentively, otherwise, they may end up with constructing an invalid research based on inaccurate presumption unfortunately.
Secondly, there is devoid of enough detail and evidence in order to claim such a accurate information. In terms of validity, they should ensure that their research method is unbiased and consistent, hence, since there is inconsistencies in the same field, they should be suspect of biasedness. In the aim of checking, they may increase their sample size or they may change their survey structure on their interviews by adding up confounding tricky questions. The statement does not mention the questions in the interviews or the points they pay attention during their observation. In summary, being sure of a method is merely viable when you are a rigid critic of this subject.
Thirdly, it is not reasonable to accept a result just because it is more sensible or easy to apply. For instance, contemplating on the possibility of rearing by entire village may have seemed arduous to them due the additional requirements of the research since this is a dense claim comparted to latter one. Correspondingly, they are more likely to favor second method apart from validity. However, speculating on other side may hold a iconoclastic result aroused from the obscurity in the system of the village. To put it another way, before undoubtfully trusting second method, they should try to explicate the results from the observations in order to grant that their inconsistencies are accidental and negligible.
All things considered, the statement has obvious fallacies enough to be unconvincing. Without additional evidences and meticulous analysis, it seem wishful thinking rather than a valid research. Before conducting interviews, they should consider these points.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: They should take into accout their ages, hence, they are more liable to give high importance on their biological parents rather than other members of the village.
Error: accout Suggestion: account
Sentence: Due to the bonds of inheritance, they tend to feel intimate and sentimental to their parents, this is an evolutional fact.
Error: evolutional Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In terms of validity, they should ensure that their research method is unbiased and consistent, hence, since there is inconsistencies in the same field, they should be suspect of biasedness.
Error: biasedness Suggestion: baseness
Sentence: For instance, contemplating on the possibility of rearing by entire village may have seemed arduous to them due the additional requirements of the research since this is a dense claim comparted to latter one.
Error: comparted Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: To put it another way, before undoubtfully trusting second method, they should try to explicate the results from the observations in order to grant that their inconsistencies are accidental and negligible.
Error: undoubtfully Suggestion: No alternate word
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 464 350
No. of Characters: 2494 1500
No. of Different Words: 232 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.641 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.375 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.138 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 193 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 137 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 104 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 79 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.091 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.311 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.278 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.495 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.058 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 741, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n inaccurate presumption unfortunately. Secondly, there is devoid of enough deta...
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Line 5, column 80, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ail and evidence in order to claim such a accurate information. In terms of vali...
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Line 5, column 200, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...earch method is unbiased and consistent, hence, since there is inconsistencies in...
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Line 5, column 215, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[3]
Message: Did you mean 'there are inconsistencies'?
Suggestion: there are inconsistencies
... unbiased and consistent, hence, since there is inconsistencies in the same field, they should be suspe...
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Line 7, column 437, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ver, speculating on other side may hold a iconoclastic result aroused from the ob...
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Line 9, column 144, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'seems'?
Suggestion: seems
...l evidences and meticulous analysis, it seem wishful thinking rather than a valid re...
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Line 9, column 178, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'valid research'.
Suggestion: valid research
...s, it seem wishful thinking rather than a valid research. Before conducting interviews, they sho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, however, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, while, apart from, for instance, in summary, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2564.0 2260.96107784 113% => OK
No of words: 464.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52586206897 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2430038803 2.78398813304 116% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 204.123752495 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515086206897 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 795.6 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 4.96107784431 323% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4752002711 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.545454545 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0909090909 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.70786347227 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128102799862 0.218282227539 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0385189391077 0.0743258471296 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420506843551 0.0701772020484 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0778647872164 0.128457276422 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0582865079702 0.0628817314937 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.5979740519 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 98.500998004 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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