Life is too short, and we need to be careful in making decisions. Many people want to build their house if they get enough money. But, others like to spend that money on making profits from a business. that it is more helpful to invest money in a business for securing the future life. this way for few most important reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, from a good business, you can make more profit. If you are a wise man, I hope you will invest money in a business and most able to earn a lot. That money is a need for your future life. My elder brother's business example is a compelling life experience of this. During his graduation, he saved 500$ and spend to a local business. He started a hardware shop in the village market. Since he did not need a house that time, and he had a lot of time in hand, he dedicated himself to the business. And only after six months, he makes more than what he spends on the business. Moreover, he loves his business, and continue till now along with his public service job. He established a charity fund for the poor village student. all his success comes from his invest that business and I wish I could follow the same path.
Second, a business platform helps us to become more sociable. In a business, you need to be amiable, friendly, and trustworthy to the client. Those are the prerequisites for being a respectable person in a society. If you have money, you can buy a house in anytime, but it is almost impossible to start up business in your retard life. For instance, my boss is a very sociable person, and he is the president of many public clubs. Before his business prosperity, he was not popular at all. Even he felt shy to communicate unknown person. But after starting his business forced him to be such good speaker and motivator. His success fascinated me, and I hope one day I also able to deliver my speech like him. So, spending money very helpful for everyone.
Finally, some people may argue that we need the house to live. But it's not as important as having a shear in a business because if you have a site business, you will able to buy your house in future. Moreover, I do not need a house right now as my father already give a one. So, I decide to spend that more money to set up a geotechnical lab. This lab was my dream, and I am sure that it will change my financial condition.
In conclusion, spending money on a business is more important than spending money to buy or build a house. This is because a business will return more money and that will change our social condition.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2119.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.38716356108 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45033133283 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478260869565 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 687.6 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 23.0 9.59856630824 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.86738351254 589% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 21.1570714244 48.9658058833 43% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 64.2121212121 100.406767564 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6363636364 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215814801603 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057784437828 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0789496394489 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135173778852 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448780636107 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.6 11.7677419355 56% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.59 10.9000537634 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.59 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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