The author of the prompt has observed that an experiment involving three hundred executives from Mentian advertising companies demonstrated that those requiring less than six hours of sleep were associated with more successful firms. Based on this observation, the author has argued that companies should only hire people who require less than six hours of sleep, in order to have greater margins. In assessing the author's argument, my view is that that the author has relied on unwarranted assumptions and have failed to take into important factors in constructing his or her argument. This essays attempts to highlight these concerns.
In the first place, the author seems to assume that an experiment involving a mere three hundred executives of similar background is enough to conclude that successful firms need to hire people who only take up six hours of sleep. For one thing, the experiment only dealt with executives and not with staffs or other types of employees, for whom the author's observation may not be valid. We also see that the people in the experiment were not randomly selected in that it only included Mentian advertising executives and not executives from other types of firms. Overall, the experiment cannot give us a general conclusion as it is limited in scope, increasing the chances that the observations are simply specific in nature or completely coincidental.
In addition, the experiment also does not prove that employees sleeping less is the cause of firms becoming successful. Indeed, it could be that people who are hardworking perhaps are less interested in sleeping or do not have the time to sleep simply because of their workload. But this does not mean that a person who sleeps less that six hours will necessarily work harder. In other words, a person can sleep less but still do not have the urge to work, whereas a person can sleep quite a bit but still have the determination to work hard. Work determination, and not the amount of hours spent sleeping, is thus what is at stake here and it behooves the author to find out whether the individuals in the experiment sleeping less than six hours were simply more enthusiastic about working.
Nevertheless, even if we are to assume that sleeping less than six hours is beneficial for companies, it does not necessitate that a company should hire people solely on this basis. Indeed, other factors such as work experience and integrity needs to be taken into account; these factors may be more important in the long run rather than whether an employee is hard working.
Overall, given the concerns that have been stated in this essay, we cannot simply adopt the author's recommendations unless the aforementioned flaws in the author's argument are resolved.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 457 350
No. of Characters: 2254 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.624 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.932 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.7 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.562 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.155 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.363 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.6 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.173 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 416, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... have greater margins. In assessing the authors argument, my view is that that the aut...
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Line 1, column 445, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: that
...essing the authors argument, my view is that that the author has relied on unwarranted a...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 458, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...thors argument, my view is that that the author has relied on unwarranted assumpt...
^^
Line 3, column 352, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... other types of employees, for whom the authors observation may not be valid. We also s...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 156, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... unless the aforementioned flaws in the authors argument are resolved.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, thus, whereas, in addition, such as, for one thing, in other words, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2302.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 457.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03719912473 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76702915671 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463894967177 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 706.5 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.8633298088 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.875 119.503703932 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5625 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.625 5.70786347227 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185009972349 0.218282227539 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0697020298683 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630865813321 0.0701772020484 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0981399259972 0.128457276422 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0582892161139 0.0628817314937 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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