Children would behave negatively before they learn how to behave appropriately. Which of the following behavior would you consider to be the most negative behavior of a child and why?
۱٫ Being selfish
۲٫ Being impolite
۳٫ Being loud
Needless to say, young children sometimes act negatively and these actions can be sometimes reflected in the way of speaking with people. This brings up a highly controversial topic regarding children's attitude in the early growth ages whether being rude is considerably bad treatment in the children or not. I strongly believe that treating impolitely is the most negative behavior that children can have. The reasons behind this standpoint are connected to the friendship with others as well as annoying relatives, explained in the following paragraphs in great detail.
To begin with, being impolite cause children not to make new friends. In other words, when young children communicate impolitely with other children in their ages and their friends, they will not be able to communicate with them. This will cause children's relationship with their best friends broken or even in the severe condition, they cannot make new friends. My brother’s experience provides an illuminating insight into this fact. When my brother was a child, he used to be an impolite person. He used to misbehave when he met his friends which, in turn, resulted in losing some of his friends. Not only did his previous relationships with his friends get broken but also he did make new friends at school because all of his classmates thought that he could not be an appropriate friend. However, These circumstances happened before he learned to behave politely with others. Consequently, if a young child is an impolite child, he or she will miss the opportunity of building a new friendship.
The second point worth discussing is related to displeasing other people. In fact, young children are not developed mentally and thus they are not able to distinguish what is a good or wrong attitude. If children treating impolitely with other people including strangers or relatives such as grandparents, it will lead to people become annoyed. One example will suffice to illustrate my point. As I previously mentioned, my brother used to be impolite before learning how to treat appropriately. One day, when my grandfather was watching to television, my brother related with her in an extremely rude manners. Although my grandmother known that he is a child and thus the child cannot differentiate the proper behavior, my mother got angry. I had not known why she left our house before I spoke with her. After a few minute talking with my grandmother, it turned out that she was irritated by my brother's statements. Hence, as you can see, being rude is a bad treatment that young children could have because of leading to irritating other people.
In conclusion, according to above-mentioned factors, I contend that the impolite treatment is a negative one due to not allowing to make new friends and displeasing other people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, however, if, regarding, second, so, thus, well, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2352.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10195227766 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94626520107 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505422993492 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 715.5 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8644144216 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2083333333 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41666666667 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24030970873 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.075125490916 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687108037715 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141144718966 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0567135693171 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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