What discovery in the last 100 years has been most beneficial for people in your country? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

In my propensity railway line is the most beneficial discovery in the last 100 years in my country India. 100 years ago our country was not well communicated as it is today. People were mostly depending upon wagons pulled by ox or horses to travel from one place to another. Travelling or transportation of goods was a big concern for the citizens of my country. Another major draw back was that India was under the claws of British Government. But one blessing in disguise was the railway line and railway stations by the British Government. It connected all the major business cities of Indi...

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