Nowadays, there are many aspects of successful definitions, such as human’s wealth, relationship with others, and contribution of this world. If we can be open-minded and take a diversify interpretations of succeeding, we would reveal that no matter which concepts either “be more like others” or “be different from everyone else” can stand firmly perspectives of succeeding. Let me elaborate further below.
To begin with, it is commonly believed that the fortune is an insignificant way to represent the human’s value; I would like to take a traditional viewpoint at first. News says that the amount of the property of top 10% the most wealthy people in the world is equal to the amount of assets of rest of the world. Let’s reduce the scale to the stock market and I’ll express my friend’s, Justin, experience as an example. He already has been in the stock market for 10 years, through the depression and prosperity of economic. Like in 2008, the housing bubble happened in the United States, soon after it subsequently influenced to worldwide and deteriorated the economy; however my friend already switched to another investment target before the economy collapsed, while most of people still invested in the same way. He reminds me if you want to make big money from this market, you need to consider the other way that no one will ever think about it. Like a pyramid, if we take the whole world population of successful human graphically. The top of the pyramid is sharp, which means only minority of people who have attributed to distinguished, outstanding, and unique will be on the top. If you want to be one of the prominent people, none of these people will follow others pace.
However, as follow the world development and human’s progression of their own mind, people can determine another way to identify succeed. There are more and more people say that even you are a billionaire, you can buy true love with money, or igneous friendship or health; therefore, fortune isn’t the only way can symbolize the succeed. Take my parent as an example, they are just like anyone else, so ordinary, simple, and work hard to earn everything in their life. Because of these factors make them don’t take anything for granted, they cherish everything come into their life, like family, friend, and everything they can appreciate. Therefore, our family is very harmony, and my parent and their friends are very bounding. In many perspectives, they can be categorized as a successful person.
To conclude, in some particular definition of succeeding it might have to be different from others, however, we can’t deny there are numerous perceptions of succeeding. That why I think either be more like others or be different from everyone else depend on what kind to idea to define success.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 182, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...orld. If we can be open-minded and take a diversify interpretations of succeeding, we would...
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Line 2, column 789, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...get before the economy collapsed, while most of people still invested in the same way. He remi...
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Line 3, column 10, Rule ID: AS_FOLLOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'as follows'?
Suggestion: as follows
...ople will follow others pace. However, as follow the world development and human's ...
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Line 3, column 335, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...e isn't the only way can symbolize the succeed. Take my parent as an example, they are...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, still, therefore, while, i think, such as, to begin with, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2388.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08085106383 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93623188341 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542553191489 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 760.5 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.0817230622 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.4 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238595045393 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071811039605 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0785564759253 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168552377557 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0678715294523 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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