The value of what you are doing is about the benefits that it has for both you and others, said by a German philosopher Nietzsche. Music, as a controversial debates on this issue, has always been debated for its advantages for both individuals and society. While a variety agreements exist about playing a musical instrument, some people believe it is a waste of time playing it.
A cognitive approach to human: men have a vast number of needs to be fulfilled in order to be healthy and productive. These range from physical to emotional needs. Accordingly, firstly, our fundamental needs must be taking care of. Subsequently, when the basic demands resolved, according to Muzlo triangle, some other high-level needs emerge. However, these requirements are all mental. Art, for example, flourish at the high level of our needs and as long as it is a need, it must be answered.
Music is a respected type of art which has many fans. Not only lessoned almost by all people around the world, but also a considerable number of music players have chosen it as their main job. Researchers have found lessening to music will reduce the tension, and it can result in more relaxation. Besides, when it comes to players, they chose it because it helps them to find an identity. In other words, music helps them to find themselves and vanquish their drawbacks. Thus, music can helps both individual and society
By way of conclusion, the nitty-gritty of life is dedicated to the fulfillment of demands. In This concept observing the sequence of men's needs might finally lead us to play Piano or Violin. Therefore, my standpoint of this issue is about to say it is just a following of our needs, and it is highly unlikely to be a waste of time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 158, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'debate'?
Suggestion: debate
...er Nietzsche. Music, as a controversial debates on this issue, has always been debated ...
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Line 5, column 489, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'help'
Suggestion: help
...nquish their drawbacks. Thus, music can helps both individual and society By way o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, so, therefore, thus, while, as for, for example, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1440.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76821192053 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76552517038 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602649006623 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.9714405428 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.7058823529 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7647058824 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88235294118 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259624620281 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07208538524 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0885738585356 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13568391563 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.073860793327 0.056905535591 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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