The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

the bar charts compare how people of different sex and age bought music albums of different genres in Britain,
it is clear that the patterns of sex and age were similar in all kinds of music except Classical.
Regarding age, those who aged from 25 to 34 PurchasIng Pop and Rock music accounted for the majority, With about 30%. However, there were fewer people Purchasing classical music, with the percentage of those who were older than 45 being the largest, at approximately 20 %. Nearly no one in the age of 16-24 bought classical music albums while the figure for them was nearly equal to that for 25-34 in other genres.
when it comes to sex, generally, more men purchased music albums than women. In details, about 30% and 20% were the percentages of male and female purchasers respectively in Pop and Rock Music. In terms of the remaining genre, both genders bought fewer aLbums, with around 5-10 %.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, regarding, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 752.0 965.302439024 78% => OK
No of words: 157.0 196.424390244 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7898089172 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53976893118 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42873180545 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.624203821656 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 226.8 283.868780488 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6408355304 43.030603864 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.428571429 112.824112599 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4285714286 22.9334400587 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 5.23603664747 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225313981577 0.215688989381 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104960627184 0.103423049105 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0609571420568 0.0843802449381 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143056513472 0.15604864568 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343475335953 0.0819641961636 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.2329268293 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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