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Submitted by magesh07 on Thu, 01/25/2018 - 15:12

These days, statistics have shown that all around the world, over a billion adults legally smoke tobacco
every day. Also, these numbers are expected to increase if nothing is done. It takes two to stop the
numbers arising and therefore, the government and the smokers have to cooperate to make the
country smoke-free.

The government should control the amount of smokers as the rising numbers could cause lost
productivity and an increase in the crime rate. Campaigns should be created and advertisements using
the mass media can actually help the smokers realize the disadvantages of smoking.

Besides that, smokers should also learn the gruesome facts on smoking. They should also realize that
there’s more to life than just smoking and that people near and dear to them could be affected from
their habit. Studies have shown that people who have family members who are smokers can actually
contract diseases such as cancer and other lung diseases.

Moreover, the increase in the number of smokers can actually mean that there would probably be an
increase in crime rates as well. Smoking would then lead to other dangerous issues like drugs,
prostitution, theft and even murder. Therefore, the government should act immediately to avoid
further damage to society.

Certain smokers who want to quit can find it hard to do so and this is when the government’s help can
come in handy. That is by increasing the age limit for adolescents to smoke, increasing tax on tobacco
products to make it a lot more expensive and also to provide support gropus for smokers who wish to
quit.

In a nutshell, smoking is indeed a problem to the nation and it takes two to work it out. The
government and the smokers themselves should work side by side to solve this issue.

Votes
Average: 7.2 (1 vote)
Essay Categories
PTE_Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 12, column 69, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...own that people who have family members who are smokers can actually contract diseases...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.5418719212 85% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 6.10837438424 246% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 8.36945812808 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 5.94088669951 202% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 20.0 20.9802955665 95% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 31.9359605911 116% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.75862068966 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1514.0 1207.87684729 125% => OK
No of words: 299.0 242.827586207 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0635451505 5.00649968141 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 3.92707691288 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59648975363 2.71678728327 96% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 139.433497537 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548494983278 0.580463131201 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 450.0 379.143842365 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.57093596059 95% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.6157635468 130% => OK
Article: 6.0 1.56157635468 384% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.71428571429 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.65517241379 82% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6551724138 119% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.5024630542 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.8897559088 50.4703680194 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.933333333 104.977214359 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9333333333 20.9669160288 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86666666667 7.25397266985 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 19.0 4.12807881773 460% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 6.9802955665 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 2.75862068966 217% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132564815388 0.242375264174 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0451285722869 0.0925447433944 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060405769625 0.071462118173 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0390442751728 0.151781067708 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0451853477303 0.0609392437508 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 12.6369458128 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.1260098522 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.54236453202 47% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.9458128079 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 11.5310837438 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.32886699507 95% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 55.0591133005 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.94827586207 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.3980295567 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.5123152709 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 72.2222222222 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 65.0 Out of 90
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