Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reason and examples to support your answers.
Becoming an adult is a really special time in anybody's life and the call to head out into the world and embrace our independence is, for many people quite powerful. I think this can depend on a lot of different factors; for example, somebody stating a job might have a different needs and priorities compared to a person who intends to go on and study at university. Generally speaking, I believe that it is better for all concerned if young adults continue to live with their families for a long time particularly if they are going to be studying at university or something similar.
First of all, it is important to consider finance. Certainly, it is possible for some young adults to get work and support themselves relatively quickly. However, in most part of the world these days it costs a lot to rent a house, attend university, buy a car or purchase think like insurance. By the way of example, I can recall trying to live independently outside the family home as a university student and I constantly struggled to pay bills and meet all other costs of living as a young adult this, in turn, has an adverse effect for things like my study performance.
Hence, in addition to the importance of finances, I think this is better for a young adult's study potential. With your family's support, it is a lot easier to focus on your studies. Of course, for some people in some situations, the family situation may actually be quite distracting or stressful. However, I think it would be fair to say that for most people you are more likely to eat better meals, have a quiet place to do school's assignments and get a decent night sleep. I can recall a friend from my university days who lived in a share house with other students. Life was a party for him but he did not eat or study well and inevitably his grades suffered. He had to repeat several subjects and finished his degree later than many of his peers.
Finally, staying at home with one's parents does not necessarily mean that a young adult cannot develop independence. I will be the first to admit that there are parents out there who struggle to acknowledge that their children have grown up and deserved treatment as an adult; it is instinctive in many of them to continue to play a 'mothering' role that can actually be quite stifling for a young adult. Despite this possibility, even though I spend most of my university days living with my parents, they respected me as an adult as well as their child and they did not attempt to interfere too much or limit my independence. I think this is a case for many other young people as well, so I do not think it is necessarily fair to claim that, just because someone is living with their family, they are somehow unable to enjoy benefits of independence. In fact, I believe the safe environment of the family is a good place to handle the transition to adulthood for all concerned, both the child and the parents.
By the way of conclusion, based on the argument explored above, I am of the opinion that in most cases it is actually more beneficial for most adults to continue living with their families for a longer period of time. Families are the precious thing and an essential part of the fabric of a nurturing society, so I have a strong belief that they can be the powerful guide to helping children negotiate the path to independence.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 243, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'somebody' must be used with a third-person verb: 'states'.
Suggestion: states
...ifferent factors; for example, somebody stating a job might have a different needs and ...
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Line 9, column 203, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...living with their families for a longer period of time. Families are the precious thing and an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, really, so, well, for example, i think, in addition, in fact, of course, as well as, by the way, first of all, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2759.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 605.0 407.700716846 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56033057851 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95951083803 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67728596135 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 286.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472727272727 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 891.9 618.680645161 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.6215833957 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.380952381 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8095238095 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57142857143 5.45110844103 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361207581895 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107824677646 0.076458572812 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748055365672 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208210201766 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0321450773038 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.76 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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