what famous place would you like to visit? use details and reasons to support your response.
Every country on whole world has an attractive place, which everyone desires to visit it. One of the most famous places that have its own luster that dazzle the eyes is Paris. It’s a piece of heaven on the earth, which everyone put it in the top of their listed of the tourism place.
Paris, a country with long history becomes the destination of every tourist in all over the world, for what it differentiates from other tourism place. First of all, it’s the country of love, every couple spend their honey moon beneath the sky of it that filled of stars. Visiting Evil tower is one of my favorite parts. It’s an imaginary place that different from another one by its architectural creativity, and it allow to see the whole shining city from the top of its. And for more enjoying, hearing the claim and romantic music while you contemplate how much the Paris is beautiful, just like one of awesome painting of different color.
On another hand, the other thing that makes Paris special is the people that live in it. It’s an exciting experience that allows me to know a new people from another culture, learning a new language. To have a new friend from another country is very important thing with respect to me.
Finally, Paris is the origin of shopping, that attract all the people who is the favorite hoppy is shopping. Since its gather all famous brand just like channel and gucci. So all people all over the world especially the rich and famous one spend their vacation in Paris in order to make shopping from known and famous trademark.
To conclude, Paris is one of the city that I will not getting bore if I visit it every vacation, due to what it have. It just an amazing country.you can forget yourself that you are in real world.
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Sentence: One of the most famous places that have its own luster that dazzle the eyes is Paris.
Description: The fragment that dazzle the is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace dazzle with verb, past tense
Sentence: It's a piece of heaven on the earth, which everyone put it in the top of their listed of the tourism place.
Description: The tag a pronoun, personal, nominative, 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a
Suggestion: Refer to It's and a
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Sentence: First of all, it's the country of love, every couple spend their honey moon beneath the sky of it that filled of stars.
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Sentence: It's an imaginary place that different from another one by its architectural creativity, and it allow to see the whole shining city from the top of its.
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Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace allow with verb, past tense
Sentence: Finally, Paris is the origin of shopping, that attract all the people who is the favorite hoppy is shopping.
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Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace attract with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Description: The fragment the people who is not usually followed by is
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace is with are
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'On the other hand' means However. It doesn't mean 'On another hand'. You may use 'In addition'
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