In some countries, the average weight of children is increasing and their level of health and fitness is decreasing.
What are the causes of these problems?
What measures could be taken to solve them?
With the development of the modern society, some nations encounter the problem of increasing average weight in younger citizens and the declining of their health and fitness condition. This essay will outline the causes of the issues and how can we deal with the issues.
To begin with, nowadays children often eat too much junk food every day. The main reasons are that parents have less time to keep the eyes on them due to the busy works and that fast food restaurants are too many that it is quite easy to find one on the street. In addition, children have less chance to exercise because of the urbanization in huge cities in where there are fewer spaces to do sports. For example, it is really challenging to find a wide and open field to play baseball in giant cities such as Hong Kong and Tokyo.
To solve the problems, schools can offer more food with balanced nutrition at school and encourage pupils, whose parents are too busy to cook at home, to eat on campus. Thus, it will limit the opportunity to eat outside for young students. Furthermore, governments should persuade the builders to leave bigger land for parks when they plan to construct the high-rising building through reducing their tax. Therefore, there will be more space for recreations in the city center.
In conclusion, according to my observation, the health problems of our beloved children are caused by the lack of exercise and by eating too much junk food. To solve the dilemma, in my opinions, schools should provide healthy food and encourage students to have meal on campus. Additionally, authorities should persuade constructors to release more fields in urban through tax reduction.
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
|---|---|---|---|
| 2018-03-06 | jackwings923 | 73 | view |
- The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 56
- At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages? 78
- There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher.What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising? How should we deal with this problem? 61
- Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology.In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make?Has this become a positive or negative development? 54
- The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 441, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'finding'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: finding
.... For example, it is really challenging to find a wide and open field to play baseball ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, really, so, therefore, thus, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1398.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90526315789 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58680983126 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 420.3 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7216757196 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.538461538 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9230769231 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.23076923077 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131299550429 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0439740594492 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630407031497 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0872534854275 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0654063952268 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.