Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? All students should be required to study art and music in secondary school. Use specific reasons to support your answer.
Since the dawn of time, people showed interest in artistic activities. Some believe that all scholars should learn about arts and music in secondary school. I totally disagree with this opinion due to the fact that some students do not have artistic skills and because it is a loss of time. I will explain my statement in detail, in the following essay.
First and foremost, art and music are not for everybody. There are people who enjoy creating art, singing, composing different type of music, from classic to modern style. On the other hand, there is a category of persons who do not have talent regarding these fields, or who just prefer enjoy and admire such manifestations as spectators. Furthermore, pupils who are forced to learn about fields they can not be proficient in, might feel ashamed, insecure and unsuccessful, leading to a low self-esteem. My experience is a compelling example. As a student, I was made to study music and painting, both in secondary school and high school, although I had no talent at all. I hated painting, I founded it boring and I can not sing. When I was twelve my music teacher asked me to sing something in order to grade me, and I had no choice than to do it. As expected, my performance was horrible and I felt pretty uncomfortable. Moreover, my teacher evaluated my execution as being extremely bad, comparing me with a goat. This experienced marked me, and from that moment I refused to sing once again. Thus, since many children do not have such talents, art and music courses should be optional.
Second, art and music represent a loss of time for many students, who, from various reasons, are not interested in studying them. Some scholars want to enlarge their horizons by learning about things from their area of interest, they want to approach domains that can be useful for future or just for entertainment. Not to mention that if art and music are perceived as being boring, students would not absorb information or they would forget everything soon after. For instance, I painted countless of sheets, I combined numerous colors and since the overall results were not exceptional, I consider this as being, a useless loss of paper and precious time.
To summarize, scholars should be able to reject classes that are not representative for them, including art and music. This is because some are not inclined to develop such talents or do not have innate talents and because it is a completely waste of time for students who are just not interested in art and music.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 230, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('completely') instead an adjective, or a noun ('waste') instead of another adjective.
...t have innate talents and because it is a completely waste of time for students who are just not i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, moreover, regarding, second, so, thus, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2095.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80504587156 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70126530188 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52752293578 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1014198164 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2272727273 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8181818182 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27272727273 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247076770654 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0720570504193 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678808494341 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160932712878 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460789034939 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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