The argument states that reducing the number of mopeds rented by each of the island's six moped rentals companies from 50 per day to 30 per day during the summer season will result in a reduction in accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians. However, the line of reasoning provided in the argument is rife with unsubstantiated assumptions and weak evidence, which weakens its force.
To begin with, the author does not provide any data about the current state and number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians in Balmer Islands. There is also no relative evidence to suggest that an increase in the population during the summer months leads to an increase in the number of moped accidents.
Also, the author does not provide any information whether the people involved in moped accidents are tourists or citizens of Balmer Islands. Providing this information would put light on the fact that whether the mopeds involved in the accidents were even rented by the tourists or owned by the local people. Maybe the poor driving skills of the local people are to blame for the accidents.
Moreover, not providing any data about the accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians can also bring the question that whether the locations of the accidents are different or the same or are they only happening in busy markets or in places which are empty ? As, poor traffic rules in a particular area or bad infrastructure of markets to handle large crowds may the reason for the accidents.
Furthermore, the author also assumes that reducing the number of moped rentals will have the same effect on the number of accidents in Balmer Islands as it had in the Island of Torseau. The author fails to think that the condition in both the islands may be different and maybe something else done in Torseua Islands could have reduced the number of moped accidents.
To conclude, the argument in its current state lacks substantial ground. Thus, the author needs to provide further evidence to clarify the above the stated assumptions to strenthen his or her claim.
- People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to addres 50
- The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette."The population on Balmer Island increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Is 63
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Thus, the author needs to provide further evidence to clarify the above the stated assumptions to strenthen his or her claim.
Error: strenthen Suggestion: strengthen
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flaws:
the arguments are not exactly right on the point. the topic told that: Torseau enforced similar limits ( on last summer) on moped rentals and saw a 50 percent reduction in moped accidents. so Balmer Island will see the same.
we may argue like:
1. the reason may be because of pedestrians or rules, not mopeds
2. some other reasons may be the cause of a 50 percent reduction in Torseau.
2. it works for Torseau. it may not work for Balmer. for example, last summer has different conditions.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 344 350
No. of Characters: 1679 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.307 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.881 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.556 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 88 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.462 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.992 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.389 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.72 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.122 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 151, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...es from 50 per day to 30 per day during the summer season will result in a reduction in accidents...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, thus, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1720.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 344.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6183236178 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473837209302 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9047143281 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.307692308 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4615384615 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84615384615 5.70786347227 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276726812361 0.218282227539 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0961286427939 0.0743258471296 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0921012324844 0.0701772020484 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139663529965 0.128457276422 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0950328113568 0.0628817314937 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.3799401198 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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