The outweigh in number of the young than the elderly in some countries stimulated a debate about the clear purpose and effect of birth policy and heightened awareness of the imbalance of age group in population ratio. After a number of overwhelmed successes achieved by the young people such as the founder of Facebook, as well as other cases, it is necessary to consider the radical role of young labor resources in developing society and thus being extensively picked over and debate in many reports and inquiries; however, the drawbacks of the young population should also be taken in comparison.
As can be seen from most of the society classification, particularly the white-collar sources or the blue-collar ones, the majority of them are from 18 to 35 years old that is the most appropriate age group for working. It is clear that the importance of young people today is extremely vital. Firstly, the modern and high technology devolved to young adults in order to cope with the workload, which may be more efficient but can mean that the young as whole is less involved in being skillful and experiences as the elderly. It is common for majority of worker and office staff are in the age of working due to their high effective energy and strength that otherwise hard to find in the older ones. Secondly, the rapid change in extensive and complex technology in digital world recently, at simplest and most practical level, the time involved in fulfilling the demands of a quick-adapted young generation has increased significantly, calling into comparison between the two generations. Furthermore, the creation of young one may take the place of discussion because of their fast genius and creative ideas.
The know-on effect of this type of population sad been to make the emotional part of the society in general an issue of intense public debate and has significantly increased the pressures on, and the stressfulness of the elderly. Where once the speedy thinking of young generation by the young neurons may produce two to five projects a day, for examples, the higher level will obviously promote and highly appreciate them rather than the slow and less effective older staffs. Problems of being jobless and stressfulness in workplace may be arise in this way that lead some people into the hopeless situation and crime rate increase. In addition, it is worse for them who are lack of experiences from life either workplace that become another problem in business and society. In fact, the young will be never success without gaining experiences from the elderly as the role of teacher or manager. There are obviously a risk of young population nowadays and it would be important for establish a clear birth policy and health improvement strategy for balance population structure to ensure there will be always a strong experienced workforce to train the next generation.
All in all, the merits of having more young people outweigh its detriments based on the positive changes they bring about in a society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
The outweigh in number of the young than the elderly...
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Line 3, column 446, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...efficient but can mean that the young as whole is less involved in being skillful...
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Line 5, column 669, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ease. In addition, it is worse for them who are lack of experiences from life either wo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, in addition, in fact, in general, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 10.4138276553 230% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 41.998997996 186% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2511.0 1615.20841683 155% => OK
No of words: 503.0 315.596192385 159% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99204771372 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.20363070211 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77717588066 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 176.041082164 148% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51888667992 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 798.3 506.74238477 158% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 11.0 2.52805611222 435% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.9738551521 49.4020404114 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 167.4 106.682146367 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.5333333333 20.7667163134 161% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5333333333 7.06120827912 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163116182715 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0526625614188 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420751337698 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0984326366039 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477429759887 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 50.2224549098 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 78.4519038076 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 30.0 9.78957915832 306% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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