Education is an important part of our lives. It often defines our future and determines our success. Some people believe that educating children has become harder due to phones and internet; others disagree. Even though some people might find phones and internet more helpful because they provide free access to knowledge. In my view, educating children is more difficult task today than it was in the past for two important reasons.
The main reason is that student became less focus. All students have a phone with a lot of apps inside it. These apps have a lot of different notifications and reminders, that could make a noise as consequences it will reduce the concentration of students. For example, last month I had to do my mid-term chemistry project. I had to make many experiments with acids. During these experiments, you should stay focus because working with acids is very dangerous. I had started my lab assignment but I didn’t turn off the notifications on my smartphone. My phone made noises as I made my observation. I had become less focus and spilled chloride acid on phone, which dissolved its. As you can see, the phone made it harder for me to be concentrated on my work, which lead to the problem.
Another important reason is that students spend most of their free time on the internet or with their gadgets. As a result, they have less time to study. For instance, two years ago I was addicted to video games. My favorite game was Civilization 5. This is a step-by-step strategy and it requires a lot of time to finish the game. Once, I had to prepare for my math exam. I thought that I could spend some time playing the computer game and after that spend some time on preparing for the test. I sat behind the computer a started playing Civilization 5. I didn’t notice that I had played all night and I had to go to my school. The first lesson was math. As you can imagine, I not only wasn’t prepared for the exam but also I felt exhausted because I didn’t sleep all night. It was hard to me to be concentrated on the exam and I even fell asleep at my desk. This experience taught me that gadgets and the internet take away a lot of free time, as a result, we don’t have time to study.
In conclusion, nowadays it became harder for many students to learn. Not only because you became less focused but also due to the fact that phones and computers take away our time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 557, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...puter a started playing Civilization 5. I didn't notice that I had played al...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1995.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58620689655 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6625056716 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48275862069 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.8762663465 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.5 100.406767564 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.03333333333 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174876374105 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0457301132233 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526887321448 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112086171716 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547599030283 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 11.7677419355 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.75 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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