Successful sports stars and glamorous film stars are role models for
youngsters. Do you support it or not? (Agree/ disagree)
The importance of role models for youngsters, which was always debatable, has now become more controversial. The substantial impact of following celebrities has sparked the controversy over the potential impact of this trend on youngster’s life in recent time. It can be agreed that following superstars have no serious purpose to serve. This essay will elaborate how it is dangerous for the kids to follow glamorous stars and how can parents and teachers should be followed rather than celebrities and thus will lead to a logical conclusion.
At the outset, there are many problems attributed to follow the life of celebrities, but the most important one stems from the fact that nearly all the the top stars are fighting for the name and fame. For instance, thanks to the social media, which shows them as very happy in their lives, but in real they are depress and frustrated. For instance, not only all the stars are alcoholics, but most of them use drugs. Hence, the Impact of kids following celebrities are indeed to dire.
Another key justification for upholding this notion is that superstars have a fake life portrayed on media, whatever they do is just for money. Teachers and parents are the real stars of society, as they care for the children from their heart. As an illustration, it is by following the order of parents and teachers that children can excel in their lives. Hence, the role of parents and teachers in shaping the career of a children is instrumental indeed.
It can be concluded that the impact of following the life of celebrities is prominent. Children should follow the life of their parents and teachers.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depressed'.
Suggestion: depressed
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, so, thus, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1376.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 278.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94964028777 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79721074852 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 212.727598566 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496402877698 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 415.8 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2054572307 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2857142857 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.71428571429 5.45110844103 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.095146332646 0.236089414692 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0349563072713 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0338078933919 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0549553204626 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337301589013 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.6 Out of 6.0
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