According to local hunters, Arctic deer populations have been declining in recent years. This decline coincides with the recent global warming trends which have caused the ice to melt. Since, the Arctic deer can no longer follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea, researchers have concluded that this is the cause for their decline.
The recent global warming trends on the melting of sea ice has some basis in the Arctic deer population decline. For instance the deer may be stranded on certain islands causing them to overgraze the land or starve. Furthermore, the ice may not solidify enough in the colder months, thus causing the migratory deer to crash through the ice and drown in the sea.
In addition to being unable to follow their migration patterns, global warming could have other negative impacts on the deer populations. The warmer climates could increase the competitiveness of resources on these islands, causing there to be fewer plants for the deer to graze on. Furthermore, an increase in Arctic deer predators could contribute to the decline of the deer population. Finally, there could be other environmental threats which would prevent the deer from reproducing at the same rate as they previously had before. Thus, their inability to follow their age-old migration patterns may not be the only reason for their decline, but rather overall changes in their environment.
Furthermore, external factors could also contribute to the decline of the deer population. For instance, local hunters could be over-hunting the deer population thus contributing to their decline. Other external factors would include the destruction of their habitat by humans or an increase in pollution.
It is inaccurate to state that their migratory patterns is the sole reason for the Arctic deer population's decline. Other consequences of global warming could be changes in their natural habitat, competitiveness, increased number of predators, or decline in their reproductive abilities. While the increase in melting sea ice correlates with the decline in deer populations, correlation does not equal causation.
- 1.Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, 63
- Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archa 77
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Need to always argue against the idea that it is due to global warming. So the arguments like argument 1 is not correct.
We may say like:
though global warming has negative impacts, maybe the deer can still follow the pattern.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 335 350
No. of Characters: 1762 1500
No. of Different Words: 151 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.278 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.26 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.742 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.706 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.295 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.529 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.393 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.601 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, if, may, so, thus, while, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1811.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 335.0 441.139720559 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40597014925 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83844340639 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477611940299 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.3455872092 57.8364921388 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 106.529411765 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7058823529 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94117647059 5.70786347227 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217191645711 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795311372604 0.0743258471296 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.027366990012 0.0701772020484 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131262719912 0.128457276422 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0321721911243 0.0628817314937 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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