In 2010, the Elmrose Corporation housed all of its operations and employees in one office. Since then, the company has expanded to multiple locations and has seen profits decline steadily each year. Clearly, if Elmrose wants to boost profits, it should relocate all of its operations and employees to one office.
The following argument is flawed for many reasons. Primarily, it assumes that because of business expansion there has been a reduction in the profitability of the firm, causing the conclusion that housing company resources in one office to be invalid.
The primary flaw in the argument is that expansion is a key reason for the reduction in profits as claimed by the firm, without any evidence. Was it the business expansion that reduced profitability or was it a lack of innovation or possibly higher competition? It is very uncertain to understand what truly caused the lower business performance. This argument could be strengthened if an analysis is done unto companies figures. By observing the number of employees, production, sales in the company and conducting market research to find customer feedback and the pricing of competitors, a clearer answer to the mystery of decreased profits could be obtained.
Another flaw in the argument is that the firm believes going back to how they started will solve their problem. However, the argument fails to realize that 2010 may not necessarily be the same as the present due to possible inflation, taxes and consumer spending. Additionally, even though the argument presents 2010 to be the most profitable year, there are no facts to support this massive stance. The argument could be improved, if a factual comparison between the present year and 2010 was made with statistics. The statistics could highlight whether the consumer spending is similar or not or which present city has an economical demographic similar to when they began.
The argument also has the uncertainty with the sum of the profits all the multiple locations each consecutive year. Justifying that profits from all locations are low is not appropriate. Since profits are difference in the revenue and costs, the revenues and costs of each place could be different. Additionally, we are not told of how many locations are opened - it could be 2 or even 200 - which leads to question what is truly the decrease in profit? It could be possible that the costs of each of the 200 locations might be lower than the 2. As such the argument can only be improved by being clear about the figures presented. By representing the number of locations and the general operating cost, a better understanding of the problem.
The argument consists of several uncertainties such as which include the flaw of the time, the mystery of the true cause of lower profits and the factual uncertainty of operating in multiple locations. Because of these assumption, the basis that placing all employees and operations in one office is not convincing, making the argument invalid.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 442 350
No. of Characters: 2193 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.585 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.962 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.788 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 159 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 143 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.048 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.181 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.238 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.302 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.511 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.086 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...raphic similar to when they began. The argument also has the uncertainty with ...
^^^
Line 13, column 547, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...00 locations might be lower than the 2. As such the argument can only be improved ...
^^
Line 17, column 214, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this assumption' or 'these assumptions'?
Suggestion: this assumption; these assumptions
...ating in multiple locations. Because of these assumption, the basis that placing all employees a...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, then, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2257.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 442.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10633484163 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88933241821 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484162895928 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5245989235 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.476190476 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0476190476 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.95238095238 5.70786347227 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148232819239 0.218282227539 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0516722269863 0.0743258471296 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471526828674 0.0701772020484 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0891423105157 0.128457276422 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374500291054 0.0628817314937 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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