As cited by the author,last year the percentage of on-the-job accidents had increased by 30 percent in Quiot Manufacturing and he/she also suggests that to decrease the percentage of accidents they must follow the work policy of Panoply Industries by shortening of work hours.At first this seems reasonable to believe but if we think more deeply there are a lot of flaws in authors research as well as in claims.
Firstly,only percentage of increasing job accidents of Quiot Manufacturing is taken into consideration by the author but the number of mishaps may have been lesser as compared to the Panoply Industries.Also experts advises are only mentioned by the author but he/she hasn't mentioned about workers advise and experts saying is also true about fatigue due to longer shifts but the reason behind such increase in mishaps may be due to lack of management of tools like old aged machines,no inspection in working areas etc.
Secondly,author claims that in order to increase productivity working shifts must be decreased as in Panoply Industries but this is not enough to readily achieve certain goals as of others.The management must be firm and dedicated as well as objective oriented.Workers must be taken good care of like life insurance and payments must be increased as according to their ability and working tenure.Furthermore working environment must be good and machines must be of producing expected outcome.
Although author makes some premises and assumptions in the argument but it is not enough to be logically right so,author needs to do further researches in order to fix the flaws and make his or her argument more pertinent.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 13.6137724551 15% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1385.0 2260.96107784 61% => OK
No of words: 269.0 441.139720559 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14869888476 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09796827667 2.78398813304 111% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553903345725 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 705.55239521 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 19.7664670659 20% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 67.0 22.8473053892 293% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 116.308587387 57.8364921388 201% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 346.25 119.503703932 290% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 67.25 23.324526521 288% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 21.75 5.70786347227 381% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164067525402 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10320676475 0.0743258471296 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0888912815882 0.0701772020484 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10320676475 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0888912815882 0.0628817314937 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 36.5 14.3799401198 254% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 3.47 48.3550499002 7% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.1628742515 204% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 29.4 12.197005988 241% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.77 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.89 8.32208582834 131% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 98.500998004 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.0 12.3882235529 226% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 28.8 11.1389221557 259% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 29.0 11.9071856287 244% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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