TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.

Submitted by paras001 on Wed, 09/19/2018 - 08:46

Being updated with what is happening around the globe is one of the good way to embrace knowledge about sundry topics. To gain idea doesn't mean everything one learns about should affect his daily life. With the advent of science and technology, the world has been a global village. Everyone has access to internet, by the help of which people are able to know about the events and changes made in every field. To the great extent, I adhere with the statement that it is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. This helps an individual to be more updated, active, informative and cautious.

First, knowing about the events around the world helps to enhance outlook of an individual. It provides information about the purpose of any sort of event. Knowledge is the greatest virtue of life. So, gaining knowledge and ideas will never harm anyone. This will develop mental peace and harmony within. For an instance, the spiritual motivational speech helps people to cope with the hard situation and motivates to move forward. Spiritual doesn't mean primitive. It also involves the modern day lifestyle and techniques to soothe the living. Knowledge about science and history is another example which helps an individual to grasp idea about evolution of mankind.

Second, the news broadcasted in television and radios, as well as social media, has made it easily accessible to everyone. Every little thing is known to people. From the ancient life history to modern political drama of the world is known to people. This helps them to be more cautious about crimes and investigation. While, makes them more active to present their views in politics, entertainment world, literature and so on. Therefore, life will be easier knowing new laws and amendments in other nations, price hikes, educational diversity, geographical knowledge etc. This prepare them to maintain their life when they go their for jobs or future education.

Third, change in time is inevitable. Everyone has to be progressive. They have to learn to adapt to the new changes and forgo the ignoble one. In the same way, gathering information about wide fields will help develop the ability to deal with changes around. With time, they will be more active and updated. They will be able to share their knowledge to younger generations. The populace of knowledgeable will increase. So, to be able to uphold the good ones, and be able to grapple in this competitive world, information is substantial.

In conclusion, to have knowledge about things happening around is crucial in today's world. This is beneficial for everyone. Real life situation will be much more better when one know about changes happening around. This will help everyone sustain in the society. This will make people wary, meticulous and discerning about certain topic so that, they can handle it properly. Thus, life is not easy, one has to do everything possible to make it easy to survive. Having information about any event will help become more knowledgeable even if, it doesn't affect their lives.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ledge about sundry topics. To gain idea doesnt mean everything one learns about should...
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Suggestion: doesn't
...nd motivates to move forward. Spiritual doesnt mean primitive. It also involves the mo...
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Line 9, column 158, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...ryone. Real life situation will be much more better when one know about changes happening a...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...p become more knowledgeable even if, it doesnt affect their lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, second, so, therefore, third, thus, well, while, as to, in conclusion, sort of, as well as, in the same way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 83.0 52.1666666667 159% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2608.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 517.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04448742747 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60296855619 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489361702128 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 828.0 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 37.0 20.6003584229 180% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.4907574466 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.4864864865 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.972972973 20.6045352989 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.51351351351 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 26.0 11.8709677419 219% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295399695826 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0742265113793 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.09855250841 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190132761359 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103617656989 0.0645574589148 161% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.36 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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