"All students should be required to take the driver's education course at Centerville High School. In the past two years, several accidents in and around Centerville have involved teenage drivers. Since a number of parents in Centerville have complained that they are too busy to teach their teenagers to drive, some other instruction is necessary to ensure that these teenagers are safe drivers. Although there are two driving schools in Centerville, parents on a tight budget cannot afford to pay for driving instruction. Therefore an effective and mandatory program sponsored by the high school is the only solution to this serious problem."
This argument asserts that all Centerville high school should mandatorily to have driver’s education in order to reduce Certrerville teenager car accidents. The author says that this policy is necessary because the only way that student will get the proper driving training is to take mandatory classes at school. However, the argument depends on several unsubstantiated assumptions and is therefore unpersuasive as it stands
First of all, it is assume that all the students should take a driver’s education. However, when some student’s parents can’t afford their money to take a cores of driver license due to their budgets, it mostly impossible to buy a car to their children so it might be non-sense. Also, requiring driver’s education to all student may be waste of time for someone who was not planning to drive and also waste of resources from the school.
Moreover, it is also assume that the school is the most effective solution to do education. In order to do this, the school should find effective instructor to conduct the education. This will lead work burden to the school office when they can’t easily find the right person. Furthermore, when student are with their friends, there concentration of education might be distracted easily because they possibly think that driver’s education is not really impacted to their overall scores. Therefore, the school should make clear position and action to the every cricumstance they may encounter.
In addition, the author’s research on accident are not sufficient. Two years date might not inadequate. For example, more before than two years before there might have none of accidents were occurred by the teenagers. And the word ‘several accidents’ is not really clear because if there are many accident were occurred by the adults and if only a few accidents where from teenagers, it is not too serious problems compare with other ages. Therefore, percentage of accident by ages is much more convincing, so more detailed data must needed.
In sum, the argument claims that high school should mandatorily make driver’s education due to the accidents occurred by teenagers is logically flawed based on the above mentioned reasons. To strengthen his or her argument, the above argument should closely examine all the conditions and possible factors. In conclusion, the author’s argument reflects unsupported claims without clear reasons or evidence.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 386 350
No. of Characters: 1983 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.432 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.137 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.65 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 159 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.316 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.473 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.31 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.559 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.102 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 21, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'assumed'.
Suggestion: assumed
...e as it stands First of all, it is assume that all the students should take a dri...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 169, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a core' or simply 'cores'?
Suggestion: a core; cores
...s can't afford their money to take a cores of driver license due to their budgets,...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 22, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'assumed'.
Suggestion: assumed
... the school. Moreover, it is also assume that the school is the most effective s...
^^^^^^
Line 13, column 308, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun accident seems to be countable; consider using: 'many accidents'.
Suggestion: many accidents
...s not really clear because if there are many accident were occurred by the adults and if only...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, then, therefore, for example, in addition, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2106.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 386.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45595854922 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01871728239 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520725388601 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4431972646 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.0 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4444444444 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.55555555556 5.70786347227 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226012823424 0.218282227539 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069047742893 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577392884464 0.0701772020484 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126022413548 0.128457276422 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519768165752 0.0628817314937 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 12.3882235529 129% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.