Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The statement points out that the decrease of deer population is lead by the arctic deers are unable to migrate. The author is based on that the statement of hunters that less and less deers are observed and that the coincidence of decline in deers with global warming. The global warming might be harmful to the exist of deers. but the assumptions based on the aforementioned reasons are not significant.
First, the article states that based on the viewpoint of hunter that the deer populations are declining, one can deduce that the number of deers are declining. The result is problematic. we should ask how hunters know the deer population is going down. perhaps these hunters just saw that there are fewer deers outside. The hunters saw the zone has less deers than before and speculate that the deers disappeared. The questionable speculation should be amend by asking what evidences the hunters found and assure the phenomenon.
Secondly, The author considers that since the decrease of deers coincides with global warming, the global warming is the main reason of the lower number of deers. The wrong causality will be invalid by thinking further that these two events might just happen at the same time. The global warming makes the frozen sea shrink, but it's unreasonable that deers don't feel that and run away. what's more, warmer weather makes plants grow and more and more food is provided for deers. The assumption that the relationship of global warming and declining deers is weak if we check the results given by the article. The more effective question is to investigate whether the higher temperature affects the frozen sea and then affects the survival of deers.
Thirdly, even the evidences we just mentioned are strong enough, others possiblities are left to be considered. there are many other ways that influence negatively or positively on the number of deers. Take human activities as exmaple. The air pollution from populous cities, vehicles, boats and any other activities we human do that might emit something are all crisis to environment and wild animals which includes deers. On the other hand, the hunters, perhaps, are the murderers who killed so many deers that number of deers decreases. Although we all don't know the truth, taken more factors will be the right way we reach it.
In conlusion, as we don't realize much about the truth, more clues are needed. The editor provides evidences which are partially correct. taken more information and researching more lead us to effecient result.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not really
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 424 350
No. of Characters: 2062 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.538 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.863 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.492 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.316 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.875 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.421 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.334 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.559 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.173 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 181, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun deers is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... the statement of hunters that less and less deers are observed and that the coincid...
^^^^
Line 1, column 271, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...f decline in deers with global warming. The global warming might be harmful to the ...
^^^
Line 1, column 310, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... The global warming might be harmful to the exist of deers. but the assumptions based on ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 330, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...might be harmful to the exist of deers. but the assumptions based on the aforementi...
^^^
Line 2, column 188, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...e declining. The result is problematic. we should ask how hunters know the deer po...
^^
Line 2, column 254, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Perhaps
...know the deer population is going down. perhaps these hunters just saw that there are f...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 350, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun deers is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...s outside. The hunters saw the zone has less deers than before and speculate that th...
^^^^
Line 2, column 454, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'amended'?
Suggestion: amended
... The questionable speculation should be amend by asking what evidences the hunters fo...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 358, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...shrink, but its unreasonable that deers dont feel that and run away. whats more, war...
^^^^
Line 3, column 387, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Whats
...that deers dont feel that and run away. whats more, warmer weather makes plants grow ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 387, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
...that deers dont feel that and run away. whats more, warmer weather makes plants grow ...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 112, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...possiblities are left to be considered. there are many other ways that influence nega...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 556, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ber of deers decreases. Although we all dont know the truth, taken more factors will...
^^^^
Line 5, column 21, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...t way we reach it. In conlusion, as we dont realize much about the truth, more clue...
^^^^
Line 5, column 137, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Taken
... evidences which are partially correct. taken more information and researching more l...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2109.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 421.0 441.139720559 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00950118765 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56041582655 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508313539192 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 16.0 8.76447105788 183% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.6921352411 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.36 119.503703932 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.84 23.324526521 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.08 5.70786347227 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0847872268554 0.218282227539 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0246425516316 0.0743258471296 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0242174668474 0.0701772020484 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0477832375991 0.128457276422 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0225873136393 0.0628817314937 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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