The author asserts that the Palean basket might not be uniquely made by Palean people since it was discovered in the near village, Lithos. He supports his argument saying that a huge river is found between the neighboring villages. The argument seems convincing at the first glance, however, it is unpersuasive as it is based on several questionable assumptions.
First, the author assumes that the river was deep and broad in the ancient time as now. However, it is possible that the level of the river was much lower in the ancient days. Paleans didn't need any boat and they crossed on their foots.If so, the fact that there was no boat doesn't necessarily guarantee that there was no communication between villages. Therefore, the author should provide information related to the river level in the ancient days to strengthen its argument.
Second, even considering that the river was at the same level as now, the author presumes that Paleans could have crossed the Brim river only by boat. However, there could have been other means to cross the river. They could have used a stone bridge linking the two villages. Using different means the basket could have been imported to Lithos village across the river. Therefore, the author should consider other ways of transportation except a boat to substantiate its argument.
Third, the author takes as granted the discovery by archaeologists with no discretion. Only one basket was founded in the entire Lithos village. The unusual finding of one basket poses several possibilities about its origin. It could have been that the basket was flowed down to Lithos village from Palea village. Moreover, it should be considered that the boat could have been missing or decayed after a long time. Therefore, the author should provide more information about the recent discovery to support its argument.
To sum up, the author presumes that the origin of Palean basket might not be exclusive to Palean given that it was found in the near village as well. The author should provide information related to the different levels of the river between two time periods, possible means of transportation between villages, and the appropriate interpretation of the discovery to improve its argument.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK, and more: other villages may have boats.
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 371 350
No. of Characters: 1825 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.389 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.919 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.589 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.55 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.888 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.556 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 185, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...much lower in the ancient days. Paleans didnt need any boat and they crossed on their...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 237, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...ny boat and they crossed on their foots.If so, the fact that there was no boat doe...
^^
Line 3, column 276, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
....If so, the fact that there was no boat doesnt necessarily guarantee that there was no...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, third, well, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1879.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 368.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10597826087 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6588462376 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445652173913 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.5117336744 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.95 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182528619434 0.218282227539 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068654020357 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623787589299 0.0701772020484 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114115854003 0.128457276422 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0624893599075 0.0628817314937 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.3799401198 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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