In this report the author argued that it was because of the mopeds renting that increased the number of accidents of pedestrians and them. There are still some questions to be solved before making this conclusion: we need to figure out what casused all these accidents last year, moreover, what is the portion that mopeds need to be charged in the statistics of the accidents. The author noted the measure taken by neighboring island which proved efficient by controlling the number of mopeds, which is also in doubt: does it really work by simply duplicating the implement?
To begin with, here I will discuss the traffic accidents between the mopeds and pedestrians. In the report, there is no obvious data that what is the main cause of moped-pedestrian accidents. What's more, the author didn't mention who will take more duty in these cases either. I must clarify that in the accidents, the pedestrians can take main responsibility if people don't follow the rule of traffic. So it is quite arbitary to determine the mopeds shoud be punished.
Moreover, the author suggeste that the government should take measures to reduce the number of a moped rental company can take by half.The statistics, however, that how many rental mopdes in acciedents, no matter who need to be charged, wasn't metioned in the report.Maybe rental companies's modes are much less than private owns.
Seaville Island, the neighbor of Balmer, made a good example by taking the mearsue metioned by the author. I wonder that is there any conneciton between the two islands. There is no similarity between them metioned in the gazette, we don't know the traffic pattern and other statistics that I discussed above. So I would be a hasty measure if the concil simple copy it.If this limitaion of mopeds rental take place in the Balmer Island, It may undermine the number of people go to Balmer island , what's worse, it could harass the economy of the island because of the shortage of population.
In conclusion, the author should make more exhaustive survery to make clear that the main cause of the accidents in Balmer Island then make furthur suggestion.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 366 350
No. of Characters: 1728 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.374 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.721 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.546 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 78 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.752 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.356 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.599 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.08 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 193, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...in cause of moped-pedestrian accidents. Whats more, the author didnt mention who will...
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Line 4, column 216, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...trian accidents. Whats more, the author didnt mention who will take more duty in thes...
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Line 4, column 370, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... can take main responsibility if people dont follow the rule of traffic. So it is qu...
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Line 6, column 136, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...a moped rental company can take by half.The statistics, however, that how many rent...
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Line 6, column 238, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...ents, no matter who need to be charged, wasnt metioned in the report.Maybe rental com...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Maybe
...e charged, wasnt metioned in the report.Maybe rental companiess modes are much less t...
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Suggestion: don't
...etween them metioned in the gazette, we dont know the traffic pattern and other stat...
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Suggestion: If
...ty measure if the concil simple copy it.If this limitaion of mopeds rental take pl...
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Line 8, column 494, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...the number of people go to Balmer island , whats worse, it could harass the econom...
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Line 8, column 497, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
... number of people go to Balmer island , whats worse, it could harass the economy of t...
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Line 8, column 559, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...harass the economy of the island because of the shortage of population. In con...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, still, then, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1783.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 359.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96657381616 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6568555047 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518105849582 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.7867180353 57.8364921388 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.357142857 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6428571429 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21428571429 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213959793871 0.218282227539 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0731220596301 0.0743258471296 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627406641705 0.0701772020484 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118381946274 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417888453921 0.0628817314937 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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