The city council of Smithville has instituted changes to police procedures to improve the visibility of the police force. These changes require that the town hire more police officers, budget more funds for police overtime, and direct officers to patrol significantly more often on foot rather than from their patrol cars. These improvements in visibility will significantly lower the crime rate in Smithville and make its citizens feel safer.
Local newspaper in Smithville asserts that the city council of Smithville will increase the visibility of the police officers by changing the police procedures. To support this idea, newspaper adduces that there should be more police officer to be hired, more funds for extra-time work, more police officer who walks on the road. The argument are seemingly logical at first glance. However, there are some unsubstantiated evidences that doesn’t connect with the idea of improvement of police visibility.
The argument is strengthened if there is additional evidence about more funds for extra-work of police. Why do they need the overtime work? Author implies that if police work overtime, then there is increasing frequency of visibility, which means there is no gap between former and after police work. However, there was no assumption that police officers are neither working individually. There should be enough evidence on more funds for police overtime.
Furthermore, local newspapers is strengthened by additional evidence that if direct officers walks around crowded area where so many people are walking. There is no such connection of having direct officers walk more than using patrol cars with helping the visibility. For example, direct officers walks more on the area of non-populated area than crowded area. This can be invalid for the argument showing improvement of visibility and secure Smithville.
Last but least, there should be a more evidence on hiring new police officers. Police officers get hired with different reasons. For example, some police officer get hired because of the space left for administration. Further, some police officers get hired because they have to control traffics. If local newspaper shows the proof of having more visibility from Smithville citizen, then new hired police officers should get in the job of direct officers.
In conclusion, increasing visibility of police line in Smithville with unsubstantiated evidences are not reasonably logical because there was insufficient information of local newspaper having. But if there are additional information about evidence with specific direction, it will eventually help to strengthen the argument of improvement of visibility of police line.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, then, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1923.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 344.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.59011627907 5.12650576532 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90931156236 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459302325581 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.471057884232 212% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.9763798053 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.15 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2 23.324526521 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7 5.70786347227 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.472138145825 0.218282227539 216% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163874709628 0.0743258471296 220% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104387548451 0.0701772020484 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.27490619044 0.128457276422 214% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117343322232 0.0628817314937 187% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 48.3550499002 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 12.5979740519 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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