"The city of Grandview has provided annual funding for the Grandview Symphony since the symphony's inception ten years ago. Last year the symphony hired an internationally known conductor, who has been able to attract high-profile guest musicians to perform with the symphony. Since then, private contributions to the symphony have doubled and attendance at the symphony's concerts-in-the-park series has reached new highs. Now that the Grandview Symphony is an established success, it can raise ticket prices. Increased revenue from larger audiences and higher ticket prices will enable the symphony to succeed without funding from the city government."
The written memo above states that Grandview symphony is now quite well established and is a running business, therefore there is no need for the government to provide funding. Although the reasons given to validate this statement seem to be acceptable at first, however, the argument is flawed with different logical issues.
The first fallacy is that symphony is apparently making profits and can increase revenue by raising ticket prices without any counter problems that might arise. since there is no clear evidence provided to support this, further data is necessary to verify this. Futhermore, as per rules of economics, we know that if the prices of products or services is increased, then the demand decreases, hence the overall profit might decrease. so, this argument is fallacious since it defines common sense.
THe second problem with this argument is that since the international artist was called to attend their show last year, their profits will definitely continue to increase and the popularity of their shows has not subsided. they might have experienced temporary rise in profits, but if they have not been able to entertain the crowd for the past year or so, then people are unlikely to pay higher prices. Furthermore, no information is provided about the demography of the people who attend their concert. The people who attended their concerts 10 years ago might have been teenagers but now that they are entering middle age, they might not be interested.
Last but not least, the amount of government funding and the operating costs of the symphony has not been mentioned. It is likely, that without the donations, symphony will not be able to bear the running costs of the concerts and hence will be forced to shut down.
Therefore, with the analytical flaws described, I am of the view that without further evidence and data as to the amount of money, the number of people who attend concerts and the demography of their customers, the strategy of stopping the allocation of government assisted funding is likely to havea negative impact on the business.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 345 350
No. of Characters: 1700 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.31 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.928 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.513 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.958 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.378 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.716 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.097 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 162, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Since
... any counter problems that might arise. since there is no clear evidence provided to ...
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Line 3, column 435, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...ence the overall profit might decrease. so, this argument is fallacious since it d...
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Line 5, column 224, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...larity of their shows has not subsided. they might have experienced temporary rise i...
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Line 7, column 267, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... and hence will be forced to shut down. Therefore, with the analytical flaws des...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, well, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1750.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 345.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07246376812 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60031504077 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539130434783 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.2488689376 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.615384615 119.503703932 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5384615385 23.324526521 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46153846154 5.70786347227 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182301935361 0.218282227539 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0644274562296 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0489959457146 0.0701772020484 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0918658559948 0.128457276422 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434500281002 0.0628817314937 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.3799401198 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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