Collectors prize the ancient life-size clay statues of human figures made on Kali Island but have long wondered how Kalinese artists were able to depict bodies with such realistic precision. Since archaeologists have recently discovered molds of human heads and hands on Kali, we can now conclude that the ancient Kalinese artists used molds of actual bodies, not sculpting tools and techniques, to create these statues. This discovery explains why Kalinese miniature statues were abstract and entirely different in style: molds could be used only for life-size sculptures. It also explains why few ancient Kalinese sculpting tools have been found. In light of this discovery, collectors predict that the life-size sculptures will decrease in value while the miniatures increase in value.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The speakers states that, collectors predict more value to miniatures than to the life-size sculptures. This prediction is based on several information which in essence negate it. To begin with, the speaker does not establish a relationship between discovery of molds of human heads and hands with life-size clay statues of human figures. How is it possible that a discovery of bady parts can lead to the conclusion that Kalinese artists used molds of whole bodies? Additionally, there is no support for the claim that Kalinese artists did not use any sculpting tools and techniques?
Further more, the speaker states that few sculpting tools have been found. It further claims that this is the reason for the miniature statues to be abstract. It deducts based on unsupported claim that molds couldhave only be used for the life-size sculptures. Why the molds cannot be equally used for both life size and miniature sculptures? This, however, does not mean that they have not been used? The future value of the life-size sculptures cannot be determined based on the possibly incomplete archeological findings.
Finally, the prediction states that life-size sculptures will loose their value and it is in contradiction to the statement that collectors prize life-size statues. Conclusion that molds have been used only for life-size sculptures is unsupported. I remain unconvinced that collectors predictions are accurate since they are based on unsubstaintiated claims. The claim that in order to depict bodies with high precision requires complete molds is a clear assumption. There is no support in the speaker's claims that collectors prediction is reasonable.
In summation, it is clear that the value of life-size sculptures and miniature size sculptures cannot be easily determined based on the weak arguments from the Kali island. The speaker is overgeneralizing one instance of ancient artisans using molds to create full-size sculptures and trying to apply this all sculptures.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK.
we may argue: The author should consider the possibility that molds and sculptures were created in a different time period.
argument 2 -- not exactly.
we may argue: there are no sculpting tools found for miniature statues either.
argument 3 -- not exactly.
we may argue: there is no direct relationship between the recent discovery and the value of these sculptures. In all likelihood, although life-size sculptures made through molds, it is possible that it will still appreciated as high-valued arts due to its realistic precision.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 312 350
No. of Characters: 1646 1500
No. of Different Words: 148 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.203 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.276 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.9 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.077 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.167 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.36 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.513 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.085 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 14, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'state'.
Suggestion: state
The speakers states that, collectors predict more value to ...
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Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[8]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some information'.
Suggestion: some information
...sculptures. This prediction is based on several information which in essence negate it. To begin wi...
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Line 3, column 526, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ibly incomplete archeological findings. Finally, the prediction states that life...
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Line 5, column 63, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...n states that life-size sculptures will loose their value and it is in contradiction ...
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Line 5, column 516, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'collectors'' or 'collector's'?
Suggestion: collectors'; collector's
... no support in the speakers claims that collectors prediction is reasonable. In summati...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, so, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1683.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 312.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39423076923 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96859071253 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483974358974 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7774482093 57.8364921388 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.5 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 23.324526521 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.16666666667 5.70786347227 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24074699718 0.218282227539 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0808774836617 0.0743258471296 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523332052311 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159108402331 0.128457276422 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524669783259 0.0628817314937 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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