The author of the argument points towards the results of a survey claiming that the citizens of the Mason City ranks waters ports among their favorite recreational activities. This, according to him is a sufficient reason for the government to spend more money on riverside recreational facilities.However, this argument is flawed in various aspects.
First of all, it is necessary to know who were the respondents of the survey and when was the survey conducted. It is possible that the survey was conducted near the beach side, a place where we generally find water sport enthusiasts. Also, it is possible that the survey was conducted many years ago and thus, those preferences are not valid today. It needs to be considered the sample size of the survey. Consider that out of the whole population of the Mason City, if only 50 people responded to the survey, of which most of them opted water sports as their preference, it doesn't mean that the whole population of the Mason City enjoys water sports.Thus, it will be a bad idea to spend on water sports recreational facilities.
Moreover the argument doesn't tells the whether the citizens prefer rivers for their water sport activities. What if the citizens prefer to swim at swimming pools instead of the river? This factor must be considered before the author makes a decision of spending on water sports.
It is unclear why the author has considered only water sports as the prime focus. The argument says that water sports is among the several favorite recreational activities of the citizens. If the author has considered this after a great degree of research and deliberation, it is not apparent at all in the argument.
Furthermore the author tells that the river has rarely been used and that, there were complaints about bad smell. If this is the case, then the first thing is to identify whether the water of the Mason River is safe for water sports or not. There may be industries around the Mason River which might be dumping hazardous effluents in the river which may prove to be harmful for the citizens. If that is so, the government must first spend on the cleaning of the river as it is a more important issue compared to recreational activities.
The author also cites that the governments spending on the river will increase the water sport activities. But it is not clear why this trend is possible. The citizens might actually visit water parks for the fulfillment of their enjoyment. Moreover, the river bank might be far away from the city and thus not feasible for the citizens to visit on a regular basis. Unless there is a record of how the spending will increase the people's interest in water sports, it will not be possible to make the prediction
the writer has made.
In general, it can be said that the author has failed to make a convincing argument. The argument ends with an entirely unjustified optimistic conclusion. It would have been wise for the author to consider the factors mentioned above.
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'then', 'thus', 'in general', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.248201438849 0.25644967241 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.160071942446 0.15541462614 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0701438848921 0.0836205057962 84% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0467625899281 0.0520304965353 90% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0359712230216 0.0272364105082 132% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.129496402878 0.125424944231 103% => OK
Participles: 0.0323741007194 0.0416121511921 78% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.67971091363 2.79052419416 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0251798561151 0.026700313972 94% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.147482014388 0.113004496875 131% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.023381294964 0.0255425247493 92% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0179856115108 0.0127820249294 141% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3004.0 2731.13054187 110% => OK
No of words: 514.0 446.07635468 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.84435797665 6.12365571057 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.57801047555 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.301556420233 0.378187486979 80% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.214007782101 0.287650121315 74% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.18093385214 0.208842608468 87% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.108949416342 0.135150697306 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67971091363 2.79052419416 96% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 207.018472906 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441634241245 0.469332199767 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 50.7343882163 52.1807786196 97% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.039408867 125% => OK
Sentence length: 20.56 23.2022227129 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4667896923 57.7814097925 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.16 141.986410481 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.56 23.2022227129 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.56 0.724660767414 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.14285714286 156% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 3.58251231527 195% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 41.9607782101 51.9672348444 81% => OK
Elegance: 1.68888888889 1.8405768891 92% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.407596555276 0.441005458295 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.135218994026 0.135418324435 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0796880832057 0.0829849096947 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.644201933515 0.58762219726 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.133989081005 0.147661913831 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.181678418994 0.193483328276 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0754189907444 0.0970749176394 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.428864791713 0.42659136922 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.146050620487 0.0774707102158 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260535213396 0.312017818177 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0811277697594 0.0698173142475 116% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.33743842365 132% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.87684729064 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.82512315271 124% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 6.46551724138 139% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 5.36822660099 130% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.82389162562 177% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 14.657635468 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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