It may be true that Mason city should increase its budget in maintaining riverside recreational facilities. However, the argument the author made is not convincing enough. It is understandable and straightforward that the residents in the city always want a cleaner river, but there are multiple obvious flaws in the authors augments.
First, the author cites a survey which implies that the residents in the city list water sports as their favorite recreational activities. However, we have no way to know the scope and the validity of this survey. If they only ask some general questions like "do you like water sports or not", then the result may not be representative enough. The sample may not be representative either, for example, the survey only includes the residents living next to the river. We just do not know. Unless more details and statistics of the survey are provided, its effectiveness to back the author's argument is questionable.
Additionally, the author asserts that the use of the river for water sports is sure to increase because of the state's plan to clean up Mason River. However, a concrete connection between the cleaning up plan and the increased use of river is not yet made. When people say they like the water sports, they may prefer playing these sports in swimming pools or water park. If there are already enough facility like swimming pools or that in other rivers in city, a cleaner Mason river may not lead to any increase in use of water sports. To strengthen his argument, the author would benefit from a survey containing more detailed information about when and where the residents choose to play the water sports.
The author also asked for an increase in the budget this year due to the clean up plan. However, we have no idea of the timeline of this cleaning up project. It may take up several years to completely clean the river, before that, any efforts in the recreation facility will be wasted or unused. Furthermore, the author also implies that the smell and water quality results from some problems which can be cleaned, this may not be true. Some smell are due to the geography of the area or some natural deposit which are kinds of factors very hard to affect.
A clean beautiful river often adds to a city's property value, and a overall quality of life for residents. The city government may have reasons to invest in riverside recreational facilities. However, the author's argument can hardly be convincing to the city government to make the decision.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 429 350
No. of Characters: 2037 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.551 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.748 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.594 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.051 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.321 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.525 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.122 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 592, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...provided, its effectiveness to back the authors argument is questionable. Additional...
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Line 7, column 449, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...eaned, this may not be true. Some smell are due to the geography of the area or som...
^^^
Line 7, column 509, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...aphy of the area or some natural deposit which are kinds of factors very hard to ...
^^
Line 9, column 67, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ten adds to a citys property value, and a overall quality of life for residents. ...
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Line 9, column 206, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...e recreational facilities. However, the authors argument can hardly be convincing to th...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2103.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 429.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9020979021 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68473996699 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4662004662 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.2211127419 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5909090909 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.18181818182 5.70786347227 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265291063954 0.218282227539 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0838252846572 0.0743258471296 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0711209220317 0.0701772020484 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163305578247 0.128457276422 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0621858321568 0.0628817314937 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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