The author asked to increase the share of advising budget based on the report from the marketing department. The report indicated the decrease of number of viewer attended the movies produced by the company. However, the movies received more positive reviews than the other year. The author concluded from this contradiction that the reason for fewer viewers is because of the public’s lack awareness of the quality of the movies.
There are several flaws in the authors argument. Firstly, the author cited the report without providing any detailed statistics. When talking about fewer people attending the movies, we need to know the exact number of viewers this year as well as the past years. Furthermore, the author didn’t provide any other information, which may be helpful to make the argument, for example, the number of movies this company released this year. If the company released fewer movies this year compared with any other year, then it is understandable to see a decrease in the number of viewers.
The viewer’s watching habits may also explain the decrease in viewers’ population. Right now, more and more people like watching movies on online streaming service like Netflix. The author didn’t make it clear whether or not statistic in this report includes the viewers from online streaming service. If that is not the case, the result of the report is biased and misleading.
The author also mentioned a higher percentage of positive reviews this year. Again, more details are needed here, an increase from 40% to 41% is completely different from an increase from 40% to 90%. The whole argument will make little sense if the increase was negligible.
In summary, the underlying evidence ,from which the author draw his conclusion, is not robust or comprehensive. The author has not considered other factors which might also affect the number of viewers, for example, the number of movies released. Only by providing more details with specific statistic can the author make a more reasonable argument.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 332 350
No. of Characters: 1643 1500
No. of Different Words: 156 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.269 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.949 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.481 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.474 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.762 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.34 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.551 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 360, Rule ID: REASON_IS_BECAUSE[1]
Message: Probably an incorrect phrase. Use 'the reason 'is that''.
Suggestion: is that
...ction that the reason for fewer viewers is because of the public's lack awareness of ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 32, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...vies. There are several flaws in the authors argument. Firstly, the author cited the...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 216, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ike Netflix. The author didn't make it clear whether or not statistic in thi...
^^
Line 5, column 227, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
.... The author didn't make it clear whether or not statistic in this report includes the v...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 11, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... is biased and misleading. The author also mentioned a higher percentage of po...
^^
Line 7, column 276, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e sense if the increase was negligible. In summary, the underlying evidence ,fro...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 36, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... In summary, the underlying evidence ,from which the author draw his conclusio...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, well, for example, in summary, talking about, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1731.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 330.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24545454545 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69889104186 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 16.0 8.76447105788 183% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.3685494221 57.8364921388 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.1052631579 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3684210526 23.324526521 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26315789474 5.70786347227 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225205948015 0.218282227539 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0746973650047 0.0743258471296 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475210752733 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138901344273 0.128457276422 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604682683616 0.0628817314937 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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