The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"The population on Balmer Island increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island plans to limit the number of mopeds rented by each of the island's six moped rental companies from 50 per day to 30 per day during the summer season. Last year, the neighboring island of Torseau enforced similar limits on moped rentals and saw a 50 percent reduction in moped accidents. We predict that putting these limits into effect on Balmer Island will result in the same reduction in moped accidents."
In the letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette, it has been recommended to limit the number of mopeds rented by island's six rental companies to reduce the moped accidents because the island of Torseau also experienced a reduction in number of moped accidents after implementing similiar limits. However, while the conclusion drawn in the letter might hold water, it rests on several unfounded assumptions that if not substantiated, dramatically weaken the persuasiveness of the argument. Thus, before this recommendation can be properly evaluated, following questions must be answered.
First of all, limiting the mopeds by each company can hamper their profit rate and consequently effect Balmer's island economy. It may happen that Balmer's population receives a majority of their income from these companies, most of them may work in these companies, this can subsequently effect their lifestyles. If the population has increased, it means that more amount of money would be required by each family to sustain a living, if either of these cases has merit, then the conclusion drawn in the original statement is significantly weakened.
Secondly, even if the rented moped are reduced from 50 per day to 30 per day, there is not much assurance that the accidents may decrease. It is possible that the frequency of these 30 mopeds may be increased, thus having no impact from the enforcement of limits. Moreover, since it is summer period, there would be increased in number of tourists, thus there might be an increase in travelling vehicles, nullifying the decrease in moped vehicles. If either of these scenarios proves true, then the assertion made in the letter is considerably hampered.
Finally, Did the Torseau island had the same situation and number of population as the Balmer island? In other words, is there any assurance that imposing similiar limits would result in 50 percent reduction in number of mopeds accidents in Balmer islands as well? Perhaps, it is possible that Torseau island may not have experienced an increase in population and that might have reduced the number of accidents to half of the earlier one. If the above is true, the argument might does not hold water.
In conclusion, the argument as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwanted assumptions. If the author is able to answer the above three questions or points and offer more evidence (perhaps in the form of a systematic research study), then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viablilty of propsed recommendation that limiting rented mopeds would reduce the number of accidents involving same.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 430 350
No. of Characters: 2161 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.554 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.026 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.771 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.875 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.324 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.572 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.069 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 211, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... would result in 50 percent reduction in number of mopeds accidents in Balmer isl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, while, in conclusion, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2225.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 430.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17441860465 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84275953502 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481395348837 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.4616681071 57.8364921388 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.0625 119.503703932 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.875 23.324526521 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.625 5.70786347227 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2870791707 0.218282227539 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0919930350656 0.0743258471296 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0954508283913 0.0701772020484 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162961264839 0.128457276422 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0899267539654 0.0628817314937 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 14.3799401198 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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