The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
While it may be true that the business in the Central Plaza might have been affected due
to the increase in skateboarding, one cannot completely blame them for the same. The buisness
depends on a lot of factors and a variety of situations. The main reason for low buisness might
be due to bad customer service, bad products, unhygenic conditions and low maintainece. Solely
blaming skateboarding might not be completely correct.
The author does not make a cogent case based on their points. Citing the view of other buisness
owners, it cannot be completely trusted as they all might lack something collectively and just
shift the blame onto skatebaording. The author needs to present valuable reason and logic to
prove that the buisness is actually affected mainly due to just skateboarding. For example,
the buisness owners might tell exactly why skateboarding is affecting them, based on concrete
points, and with the help of customers view, instead of just the views of other buisness owners
in the vicinity.The owners might themselves be affected in other ways due to the skateboarding
like being distrubed from the sound and nuisance, stuff getting damaged, etc. This might ick the
owners and therefore request to prohibit skateboarding, blaming them for the sales.
Additionally, the author implies that there has been increase in the vandalism and litter in
the area, not directly blaming the skateboarders for this, but implying the fault of the same.
This cannot be validated and relied upon as this might be the fault of the buisness owners
themselves, not taking proper care of the maintainence of the area as well as vandalising it on
their own to strengthen their claim. They should confirm with propers eye witnesses as well as
show complains from the customers regarding the same to verify their claims. They should also
be more vigilant and alert regarding such practices, improving upon them by implementing proper
grabage and litter disposal techniques and maintaining the appropriate hygiene for the
customers to visit with content and satisfaction.
Building upon the implication that their sales are affected just because of the skateboarders
and not considering other factors, the author creates a vague impression of their stance, as
they cannot completely blame just one factor at large and ignore the others. Prohibiting an
activity like skateboarding might improve the sales in the Central Plaza by some margin but it
won't actually ameliroate until they tackle it headstrong. They need to make proper reforms in
the area, giving more importance to the maintainence as well as the beautification of the
surrounding area so that customers are attracted to it. They also need to keep in mind and work
upon to amend their previous mistakes by improving their customer service along with giving
better prices and deals so that they actually have an increased intake of potential customers.
A no nuisance area without the sheninigans of the skateboarders might improve the footfall of
the Central Plaza by a little, but it won't turn out be a great win for the buisness owners
until they actually work upon the basic amenities that they should improve, which might
actually help them win by a landslide. For these reasons, this author's arguement is not likely
to significantly persuade the respected authorities to expunge skateboarding at the Central Plaza.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 49 15
No. of Words: 553 350
No. of Characters: 2792 1500
No. of Different Words: 237 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.849 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.049 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.797 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 195 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 147 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 110 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 70 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 11.286 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.682 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.388 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.201 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.834 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.037 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 37 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, may, regarding, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 28.8173652695 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 55.5748502994 133% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2949.0 2260.96107784 130% => OK
No of words: 550.0 441.139720559 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36181818182 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84273464058 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88302183065 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 204.123752495 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454545454545 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 861.3 705.55239521 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.3974896159 57.8364921388 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.210526316 119.503703932 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9473684211 23.324526521 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15789473684 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 37.0 5.15768463074 717% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 35.0 5.25449101796 666% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106280711188 0.218282227539 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0396425285907 0.0743258471296 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0479734866878 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0319373108288 0.128457276422 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0514880978829 0.0628817314937 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 14.3799401198 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.4 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 98.500998004 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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