The following appeared in a letter to the editor of Parson City's local newspaper.
"In our region of Trillura, the majority of money spent on the schools that most students attend — the city-run public schools — comes from taxes that each city government collects. The region's cities differ, however, in the budgetary priority they give to public education. For example, both as a proportion of its overall tax revenues and in absolute terms, Parson City has recently spent almost twice as much per year as Blue City has for its public schools — even though both cities have about the same number of residents. Clearly, Parson City residents place a higher value on providing a good education in public schools than Blue City residents do."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the letter it is mention that, in the region of Trilluria, Parson City is spending more money on education then Blue city. So conclusion is drawn that Parson City is providing good education then Blue city. However, before evaluating this conclusion some question must be answer and some assumption must be taken into the consideration.
To begin with, how many numbers of residents are taking the education in Parson City as compare to Blue City? Even though number of resident in Parson City and Blue City are same but their maybe possibility that number of youngster going to school and collages are more in Parson City than Blue City. If this is true then it is blatant that more money is required for Parson City than Blue City. But it is not plausible that Parson City is providing good education than Blue City.
Secondly, what is the condition of school and collages in Parson City as compare to Blue city? OR what quality of education is provided to Parson City compare to Blue City? Maybe Blue City School and collages foster Parson City to grow. Maybe Parson City is repairing their school and collage so it can entice more students. There is also the possibility that Parson City is hiring some good experience teachers. In this case it is blatant that Parson City will required more money as compare to Blue City because, maybe Blue City already have all this with some better facilities. If this happens to be true then conclusion drawn from the letter does not hold water.
Finally, how many numbers of school and collages are there in Parson City as compare to Blue City? If there is more number of school and collages in Parson City than It seems to be plausible that more capital is required to bolster the schools of Parson City. In these cases it is blatant that Parson City will require more money than Blue city. Considering this scenario it is not apt to draw conclusion that Parson City is providing better education than Blue City.
In conclusion, hence assumption made in the latter, are dubious and erroneous. If all above question are answer and evidence are provided then it will strengthen the argument.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 373 350
No. of Characters: 1731 1500
No. of Different Words: 131 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.395 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.641 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.296 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 52 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.65 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.06 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.492 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.636 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.228 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 463, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'require'
Suggestion: require
...ase it is blatant that Parson City will required more money as compare to Blue City beca...
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Line 5, column 583, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e all this with some better facilities. If this happens to be true then conclusion...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1778.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 373.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76675603217 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35771641645 2.78398813304 85% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 204.123752495 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.340482573727 0.468620217663 73% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 574.2 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7723587799 57.8364921388 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.9 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.65 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298801382343 0.218282227539 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148697293165 0.0743258471296 200% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0858711820001 0.0701772020484 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189577887777 0.128457276422 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11242213917 0.0628817314937 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.3799401198 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.86 8.32208582834 82% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 98.500998004 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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