The following appeared in a letter from a homeowner to a friend.
"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town — Adams Realty and Fitch Realty — Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."
The author compares the real state in our town namely adams realty and fitch realty. The author is trying to convey the message that adams realty is much better than fitch realty by giving some points. but the points which are conveyed by the author is vagued and has no solid evidence to substantiate it. I will try to explain these fallies provided by the author.
Firstly, the author is saying that adams realty is superior than fitch realty on the basis of comparing the number of agents on them. adams realty has 40 agents and fitch realty has 25 agents. More, number of agents does not mean that adams realty is better. may be the efficiency of the agents working in the adams realty is average compared to the fitch realty. fitch realty agents are working parts times, this shows that there efficiency is much higher than adams realty because their agents do not need to spend so much time on the work. they can finish their work in far less time compared to adams realty.
Secondly, the author states that adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to fitch's $144,000. More revenue does not mean profit. may me fitch has less revenue than adams' but making more profit than fitch.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 203, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...han fitch realty by giving some points. but the points which are conveyed by the au...
^^^
Line 5, column 61, Rule ID: SUPERIOR_THAN[1]
Message: The adjective superior is normally used with 'to'.
Suggestion: to
...is saying that adams realty is superior than fitch realty on the basis of comparing ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 135, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Adams
...comparing the number of agents on them. adams realty has 40 agents and fitch realty h...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 260, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: May
...s not mean that adams realty is better. may be the efficiency of the agents working...
^^^
Line 5, column 365, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Fitch
...s average compared to the fitch realty. fitch realty agents are working parts times, ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 544, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...need to spend so much time on the work. they can finish their work in far less time ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 201, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: May
...000. More revenue does not mean profit. may me fitch has less revenue than adams bu...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, may, second, secondly, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 55.5748502994 38% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 16.3942115768 6% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1042.0 2260.96107784 46% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 225.0 441.139720559 51% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63111111111 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87298334621 4.56307096286 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 1.95606054086 2.78398813304 70% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 204.123752495 55% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502222222222 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 307.8 705.55239521 44% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.2862714836 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.1538461538 119.503703932 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3076923077 23.324526521 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.53846153846 5.70786347227 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.371329967045 0.218282227539 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.173157273956 0.0743258471296 233% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140426625783 0.0701772020484 200% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244844657211 0.128457276422 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0794601722112 0.0628817314937 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 14.3799401198 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 48.3550499002 147% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.197005988 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 12.5979740519 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.94 8.32208582834 83% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 98.500998004 36% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.