The memo here presented by a budget planner officer of the Grandview city states that the city should not give fund to the Grandview Symphony onwards. This argument fails to maintain several key factors on the basis of which it could be evaluated. To satisfy this conclusion, the budget planners' reason is that the reputed symphony of the city already got enough private investor and tremendous public as an audience. However, careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides little justification for the conclusion. Hence, the argument is considered incomplete and unsubstantiated.
First of all, the argument readily assumes that the city officials agreed with the symphony to underwrite them till they become self-sustaining. This is merely and the assumption made without solid ground. The argument does not explain, what are the prerequisites of the symphony to call as self-sustaining. There can be a possibility that this musical organization was a purely non-profit organization. It may be a source of pleasure of the city resident who works hard to pay tax to the city government and who think that it is right to get free entertainment at least from the symphony as returns of their plentiful tax payment. There is also a possibility that the symphony is considered as a governmental body of the city as other nearby cities which are purely funded to serve people free of cost.
Second, the arguer argues that two years ago, the symphony hired one repudiate conductor, who became a success to attract many private investors and many devoted audiences, which are enough to sustain the symphony independently. This again is a weak analogy used by the argument and it does not demonstrate the clear correlation between the member of the participants/stakeholders and self-sustain of the musical organization. The city official fails to explain, what if all the participant just came to entertain the government funded musical programme. It also fails to explain that the private party and the devoted audience contributions are enough to sustain the symphony longer or not.
Moreover, a memo states that tripled number of contributors and a large number of audience, which earned after a decade of the establishment of the Grandview symphony, are the foundation evidence to take out financial responsibility. However, micro-investigation of supported clues depict that it provides little support for the authors' statement in various critical aspects and raises some skeptical questions. For example, what was the initial funding amount? The ratio of funding and self-contributing amount by an organization is decreasing or increasing in past years? what are public verdict towards the symphony; a charitable governmental body or a profitable private organization? Without the convincing answer to these questions, the reader is left with the impression that the budget planner officers' claim is more of a wishful thinking rather than the substantive evidence.
In sum, the argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, the author must provide clear and more concrete information about the financial history of the Grandview Symphony as well as public verdict about the privatization of the symphony.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK. better to say: maybe the internationally known conductor has a very high salary.
argument 3 -- not exactly
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 512 350
No. of Characters: 2674 1500
No. of Different Words: 250 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.757 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.223 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.074 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 210 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 164 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 110 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 71 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.273 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.014 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.299 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.495 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.053 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 65, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...that tripled number of contributors and a large number of audience, which earned after a decade o...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 330, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...that it provides little support for the authors statement in various critical aspects a...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 575, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
...decreasing or increasing in past years? what are public verdict towards the symphony...
^^^^
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... rather than the substantive evidence. In sum, the argument is unpersuasive as ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, well, at least, for example, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 30.0 16.3942115768 183% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2733.0 2260.96107784 121% => OK
No of words: 511.0 441.139720559 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34833659491 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25818009503 2.78398813304 117% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 204.123752495 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.500978473581 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 864.0 705.55239521 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.7838071649 57.8364921388 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.826086957 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2173913043 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13043478261 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373476360971 0.218282227539 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0882252580555 0.0743258471296 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0888502808269 0.0701772020484 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189322686123 0.128457276422 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0619367392271 0.0628817314937 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 98.500998004 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.