The author concludes that it would be better that the chain cheese store discontinue stocking the imported cheese and concentrate on domestic cheese. To justify this conclusion the author notes that survey of the Cheeses of the World magazine shows that the subscribers of the magazine tend to buy domestic cheeses. The argument distorts the view of the situation by manipulating facts and providing weak evidence.However, scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides little support for the conclusion. Hence, the argument is incomplete or unsubstantiated and has several flaws.
First, the argument assumes that because last year all of the five best-selling cheeses at their new store were domestic cheeses, therefore, people prefer domestic cheeses to imported ones. This is merely an assumption without much solid ground. For example, it is probable that in the other stors in other regions people buy more imported cheeses. Hence, the argument would have been much more convincing if it explicitly states the other stores statistics.
The author also claims that the syrvey of the Cheeses of the World magazine shows the increasing preference for domestic cheeses. This again is a weak and an unsupported assumption as it does not demonstrate the subscribers of the magazine details. To illustrate further, in the survey the umber of the participants is important, also the writer does not talk about the magazine, if it is a domestic cheese magazine then its most of the subscribers perefer domestic cheeses. If the argument provides evidence that the survey is reliable and have enough participants from all over the country then it would be much cogent and convincing to the reader.
Finally, the author notes that the best way to reduce the expenses is limiting the imported cheeses in their inventories since, he believe that people like domestic cheeses. However, scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provide little support for the author’s conclusion in several critical respects. As instance, maybe their stores does not provides high quality imported cheeses, or ther price is high in comparision to the competetors. Thus, the reader left with the impression that the author’s evidence is not substantive.
In conclusion, the author’s argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, the author must provide better evidence, perhaps by way of a comprehensive and reliable survey of the customers. Ultimately, to better evaluation of the argument, it would be necessary to know more information about what is the costumers’ preference.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 415, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...ating facts and providing weak evidence.However, scrutiny of the evidence reveals that ...
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Line 3, column 52, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...argument assumes that because last year all of the five best-selling cheeses at their new ...
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Line 3, column 440, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'stores'' or 'store's'?
Suggestion: stores'; store's
...ncing if it explicitly states the other stores statistics. The author also claims tha...
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Line 5, column 132, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'believes'.
Suggestion: believes
... cheeses in their inventories since, he believe that people like domestic cheeses. Howe...
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Line 5, column 351, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'provide'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: provide
...s instance, maybe their stores does not provides high quality imported cheeses, or ther ...
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Line 5, column 351, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'provide'
Suggestion: provide
...s instance, maybe their stores does not provides high quality imported cheeses, or ther ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2191.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 408.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37009803922 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00067174172 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.441176470588 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 682.2 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7062721717 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.315789474 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4736842105 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26315789474 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220794326796 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0664754740972 0.0743258471296 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641194437926 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124356284732 0.128457276422 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586625040313 0.0628817314937 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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