Writing Integerated - TPO 25

In this set of materials, the reading part discusses the reasons that show why the jars, which are found in the Iraq, are not batteries, and the listening section casts doubt on the information presented in the article, and argues that these are not convincing evidence.

First the passage posits that the archaeologists have not found any wire or other materials have used as conductor near the vessels. However the talk makes the point that absence of a wire does not show anything, and local people should not locate wire or other materials near vessels for archeologists. They can use these batteries with other devices, which contain conductor.

Second, the text asserts that copper cylinders inside the jars are looks like the cylinders, which were founded near the Seleucia, which had been used to store the scrolls of sacred texts. On the contrary the lecturer believes that being similar to other material is not strong evidence, maybe the copper cylinder used as container for scrolls but it adopted to other usage as the battery.

Third, according to the passage, in the time that these vessels created there is not any electronic device presented to be used and the vessels would have been useless. The professor disagrees with this point, and postulates that even though there was not any electric device but they can make mild electric shock whit them to convince people that they have an invisible power or they can use to stimulant muscles to relief the pain as we use today.

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the archaeologists have not found any wire or other materials have used as conductor near the vessels.
the archaeologists have not found any wire or other materials that have used as conductor near the vessels.
the archaeologists have not found any wire or other materials used as conductor near the vessels.

maybe the copper cylinder used as container
maybe the copper cylinder was used as container

in the time that these vessels created there is not any electronic device presented
in the time when these vessels are created there is no any electronic device presented

even though there was not any electric device
even though there was no any electric device

to relief the pain as we use today.
to relieve the pain as we use today.

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No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2

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Score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 12
No. of Words: 253 250
No. of Characters: 1214 1200
No. of Different Words: 137 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.988 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.798 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.307 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 77 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 61 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 37 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.629 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.427 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.724 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.113 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4