The following appeared in a memo from the chairperson of the school board in the town of Saluda.
"For the past five years, Mr. Charles Schade has been the music director at Steel City High School, and during that time the school band from Steel City High has won three regional band competitions. In addition, the quality of the music rehearsal facilities and musical instruments at Steel City High has improved markedly over the past five years. Because of such successes at Steel City High, the Saluda school board should hire Mr. Schade to plan and direct the general music education programs for the entire Saluda school system."
The memo from the chairperson of the school board in the town of Saluda reads that the steel city high school band has won three regional band competitions. this success has been accredited to the school's music director, mr. Charles Schade and to the improvements in the quality of the facilities and the instruments provided. because of this reason, the chairperson suggests that mr. Schade be hired to direct the general music education for the entire Saluda school system. though the suggestion of the chairperson holds water, there are several unfounded assumptions, that if not substantiated, w...
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 417 350
No. of Characters: 2093 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.519 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.019 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.766 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 160 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 25.551 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.371 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.631 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.117 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 158, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...s won three regional band competitions. this success has been accredited to the scho...
^^^^
Line 1, column 198, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'schools'' or 'school's'?
Suggestion: schools'; school's
...this success has been accredited to the schools music director, mr. Charles Schade and ...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 328, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Because
...acilities and the instruments provided. because of this reason, the chairperson suggest...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 477, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Though
...on for the entire Saluda school system. though the suggestion of the chairperson holds...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 115, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ion for the entire towns school system? As clearly stated in the memo mr. Schades ...
^^
Line 5, column 221, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...facilities and the musical instruments. this might be the major reason for the stude...
^^^^
Line 5, column 276, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this competition' or 'those competitions'?
Suggestion: this competition; those competitions
...he major reason for the students to win those competition and the influence of mr. Schade may be ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 347, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...ence of mr. Schade may be very minimal. therefore, it is necessary to know the reason for...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 401, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...is necessary to know the reason for the students success. this can be achieved by interv...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 419, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...ow the reason for the students success. this can be achieved by interviewing the stu...
^^^^
Line 7, column 102, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Though
...ve the students played the major role? though the director might have played an impor...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 264, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...ion here is by the students themselves. it is how well these kids imbibed the teac...
^^
Line 7, column 375, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Here
...r, that made them ace the competitions. here both the director and the students have...
^^^^
Line 7, column 454, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Will
... have worked hand in hand harmoniously. will all the students in the town are compet...
^^^^
Line 7, column 530, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Because
...e competent or unite together to do so? because otherwise the result expected cannot be...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 530, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e competent or unite together to do so? because otherwise the result expected cannot be...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 136, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... to completely agree upon the argument. if the chairperson answers the above menti...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, third, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2155.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 417.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16786570743 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85501250244 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47242206235 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.8473053892 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1383587761 57.8364921388 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.3103448276 119.503703932 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.3793103448 23.324526521 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.41379310345 5.70786347227 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 8.20758483034 244% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.347926540785 0.218282227539 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0891105962262 0.0743258471296 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107891731654 0.0701772020484 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200585647996 0.128457276422 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.148147301658 0.0628817314937 236% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.3799401198 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 48.3550499002 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.197005988 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.11 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.1389221557 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.